TOEFL essay: Having jobs while you are students

[Minhduc]

TOEFL essay: In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details.

Nowadays teenagers are becoming more and more dynamics. While they are still students they actively look for jobs. In my opinion, I strongly support this idea.

First of all, jobs will give students more experience. Especially, if the job is related to what they are studying in school. For example, if a student's major is Economics, he can apply economical rules to real life situations and see whether these rules work or not. Moreover, real situations are much more complicated than simplified ones in the theory taught in school. Therefore, jobs can provide teenagers invaluable things which he can not find in school.

In addition, by working, students can earn money to pay partly or entirely their tuition fee. They can also use this money to buy books and pay for other expenses. To students who their own family budget is just enough, having jobs can help them to overcome financial difficulties.

To sum up, having jobs while you are students has many advantages. of course teenagers should not forget that their main duties and goals are studying and they shouldn't let part-time jobs affect their GPA.

[EnglishRaven]

[Minhduc]

Hi, Jason
Thank you very much for giving comments and suggestions on my essays. Actually, I was not very satisfied with this essay, I thought that it was rather short, you know. Now, I know how to make it become longer and better