TOEFL essay: People behave differently when they wear different clothes

[Luckyboydtt]

Hy guys, please help me to give some advice. Thanks

In the daily life, all people always contact with the others. They always have much preparation to have the good communication with the others. They also know how to wear the suitable clothes for different situation. They will have the best behavior with many different appropriate clothes for each situation. Because different clothes will bring many comfortable way behavior for all people in each situation.

Wearing different clothes will make people can get many good thinking from the others. For most of people, they always want to change their style in clothes, because they will feel new and interesting in the other views. It makes them feel confident when they talk to the others.Such as, with a film actor, he always have to appear before many people, so using different kinds of clothes will bring his fan a good sympathy and less bored. Moreover, people always have different communications which they meet in a day. Thus; they have to many different clothes to be suitable with each situation.

However, different clothes also can bring the unlucky for people. In many real situations, many people wear a very strange clothe for their work, so it will bring the unpleasure to the others who will work with them. Thus; it is very difficult to finish the works and make the people of this cloth feel difficult to behave with the others. For example, in a wedding, a man wears a black suit,so how are the thinking of bridegroom and bride? They will be very sad because any unlucky can occur with them. The man will be a shame of it, and can say in usual ways.

It is clear that, wearing different clothes will make people have different behavior. In my opinion, changing clothes in suitable ways will bring many advantages in the behavior of all people. It will makes people feel easy and comfortable when they contact with the others.

[minhduc]

Hi,
I think your essay is good, it has clear main points and specific examples and details.
However, I don't understand this sentence "The man will be a shame of it, and can say in usual ways."

[Luckyboydtt]

Oh. You are right. It has some mistakes. Because at the last of my essay, i felt sleepy. Thanks for you comment

[Luckyboydtt]

In the daily life, all people always contact with the others. They always have much preparation to have the good communication with the others. They also know how to wear the suitable clothes for different situation. They will have the best behavior with many different appropriate clothes for each situation. Because different clothes will bring many comfortable way behavior for all people in each situation.

Wearing different clothes will make people can get many good thinking from the others. For most of people, they always want to change their style in clothes, because they will feel new and interesting in the other views. It makes them feel confident when they talk to the others.Such as, with a film actor, he always have to appear before many people, so using different kinds of clothes will bring his fan a good sympathy and less bored. Moreover, people always have different communications which they meet in a day. Thus; they have to many different clothes to be suitable with each situation.

However, different clothes also can bring the unlucky for people. In many real situations, many people wear a very strange clothe for their work, so it will bring the unpleasure to the others who will work with them. Thus; it is very difficult to finish the works and make the people of this cloth feel difficult to behave with the others. For example, in a wedding, a man wears a black suit,so how are the thinking of bridegroom and bride? They will be very sad because any unlucky can occur with them. The man will be lonely between the others and feel difficult to say any word.

It is clear that, wearing different clothes will make people have different behavior. In my opinion, changing clothes in suitable ways will bring many advantages in the behavior of all people. It will makes people feel easy and comfortable when they contact with the others.

[Silvana_]

[Luckyboydtt]

Hi Silvana_
Thanks for your advice. They are very good for me. Why do you think I will be angry. However, I'm very happy because you help me to improve my English.Because I want to get high scores in TOEFL test.I know my essay is not good.:d
I will correct my essay and post again.
I have some problems
1. When I can use the with nouns.
2. Because[different]--> I want to write a thesis sentence. Can you suggest me some ideas.
3. the unlucky : it means that something is not lucky for you.
4. [Are you sure? Black suits a classical appearence for all kinds of public,formal and ceremonial situations] [b]-->you are right. I will correct it

[Silvana_]

Hi again Luckyboydtt,
I can not completely understand what are your questions about ? So I would suggest to give me some examples and I will correct them if necessary. OK?
So have a good look at your essay and my corrections, think about what do you want to ask me and what you do not understand and shoot. When I have some time I will send you back the answers.
See you around,
Silviya
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