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[jeevarajah]

Dear members,

Is there anything seriously wrong with the advertisement write-out below?

Receptionist cum HR Assistant required at IBI. Female. Min Cert or Diploma. Freshies are also considered. Conversant in English. Telephone etiqqute. Pls call 03-89618118 or email: jjeeva@ibibrass.com.

Regards,
Jeeva

[Mister Micawber]

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Receptionist cum HR Assistant required at IBI. (X?) Female. Min [use full word] Certificate or Diploma. No experience necessary. Conversant in English and telephone etiquette. Please call 03-89618118 or email XXX@YYY.com.

(In my country, advertising for a specific sex is forbidden. Abbreviations should always be avoided if possible.)
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Canadian-American native speaker
who teaches English for a living at Mister Micawber's
ESL cafe: Interview with Mr. Micawber

[jeevarajah]

Hi Mister Micawber,

Is "freshies are also considered" grammartically wrong?

Regards,
Jeeva

[Mister Micawber]

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No, but it sounds too casual and unbusinesslike.

(By the way, 'freshman' does not apply to beginners in the workforce in all Englishes.)
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Canadian-American native speaker
who teaches English for a living at Mister Micawber's
ESL cafe: Interview with Mr. Micawber

[jeevarajah]

Thanks.

[Jamie (K)]

Also, don't use the preposition "cum", because it's more often used as an obscene word nowadays than as a preposition meaning "combined". Many readers in your target audience will be familiar only with the obscene word, and not with the preposition.

I looked for the word "freshy" in two commonly used desktop dictionaries, and it's not in them. So I looked for it at a website that searches ALL major dictionaries, and I got no results. To tell you the truth, the word sounds derogatory, and when it's combined with the word "cum", some people are going to think you're advertising for a "sexretary".