TOEFL essay: Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time...

[tienhoa]

I'm going to take the test. Can you give me my score?
Agree or disagree?
Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable lessons for the future.

An English proverb goes: no pain, no gain. This old saying teaches us that most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable lessons for the future. I agree with this statement and will support my view with some reasons below.

In the first place, doing difficult things prepares us for important work we may face in the future. If we practise before doing something, we will have useful experiences by making mistakes. Mistakes will teach us what to do to avoid them and how to do better. Practising a thing again and again will help us do the work faster and become expert on what we do.

In the second place, difficult things will teach us how to be a real man. For example, I have to study for the entrance exams to go to college. Most of the tests are useless for my future. But I force myself to study because I will have a chance to do my best and discover my ability. Moreover, I can be trained to be patient, self-confident, and calm in stressful situations.

To sum up, I strongly recommend that we should experience difficulties and overcome them to do better in the future. No one can really understand the meaning of success if they do not confront problems.

[tienhoa]

no one wanna help me so sad

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[sham]

It is always better to use examples in body paragraph,not in introduction.

[gabriel123]

[tienhoa]

thanks so much!!!

Ok, it's hard for me to distinguish "train" and "improve". Maybe I can't avoid such mistakes on the test. But if I write longer and with more examples essay, my score will be...??? And you say mine is informal but I don't understand why.

Cheers ( I copy it from you i'm hopeless at remembering these)