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#2 (permalink) Wed Mar 19, 2008 14:37 pm I'll listen to what you have to say about this |
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Your sentence is a comma splice, Ofriendragon. You need a word that joins the two halves or you need to make it two sentences. If you change it to two sentences, you should add something such as an introductory word to help the transition from the first sentence to the second sentence. The way your sentence is written now simply sounds choppy.
The way you choose to repair your sentence will add context and will thus have some effect on the "feel" of the sentence. . _________________ "Nearly all men can stand adversity, but if you want to test a man's character, give him power." ~ Abraham Lincoln |
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Yankee I'm a Communicator ;-)

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#3 (permalink) Wed Mar 19, 2008 15:12 pm I'll listen to what you have to say about this |
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B: I think this XXX is correct, Mr A. I'll listen to what you have to say about this (XXX).
Now what will Mr. A feel ? :-)
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Ofriendragon I'm new here and I like it ;-)
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#4 (permalink) Wed Mar 19, 2008 15:40 pm I'll listen to what you have to say about this |
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. It sounds choppy and disjointed to me. . _________________ "Nearly all men can stand adversity, but if you want to test a man's character, give him power." ~ Abraham Lincoln |
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Yankee I'm a Communicator ;-)

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#5 (permalink) Wed Mar 19, 2008 15:50 pm I'll listen to what you have to say about this |
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Ofriendragon I'm new here and I like it ;-)
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