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Paragraph correction: I felt The Shawshank Redemption was the best movie ever... #1 (permalink) Mon Mar 31, 2008 7:51 am   Paragraph correction: I felt The Shawshank Redemption was the best movie ever...
 

Could some one please check if there are any grammatical mistakes in the following paragraph? Suggestions are also welcome.

I felt The Shawshank Redemption was the best movie ever made. It simply touches your heart -- no complicated stuff to ponder over, no great logic to comprehend, no breath-taking action sequences, no gushy scenes – it’s as simple as they come, yet it makes you pensive and contemplative.

Morgan Freeman has acted exceptionally well in the movie. His voice holds you mesmerized through the movie and some of the dialogues pull hard at your heart-strings.

I also liked Guy Ritchie’s Snatch. It’s really funny.

I watch it every time it comes on Zee Studio. Brad Pitt takes everyone by surprise when he speaks (blabbers) in that incomprehensible accent :lol:
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Paragraph correction: I felt The Shawshank Redemption was the best movie ever... #2 (permalink) Mon Mar 31, 2008 9:34 am   Paragraph correction: I felt The Shawshank Redemption was the best movie ever...
 

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Don't use 'goddamn'; and I suspect as well that 'pikey' is derogatory.
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Paragraph correction: I felt The Shawshank Redemption was the best movie ever... #3 (permalink) Mon Mar 31, 2008 10:18 am   Paragraph correction: I felt The Shawshank Redemption was the best movie ever...
 

Thanks Mister Micawber for your suggestions. I'll make sure I won't use goddamn again.

As for pikey, I didn't know it was derogatory. Sorry about that.

May I know if there are any grammatical mistakes in it? Please suggest improvements, if any.
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Paragraph correction: I felt The Shawshank Redemption was the best movie ever... #4 (permalink) Mon Mar 31, 2008 13:49 pm   Paragraph correction: I felt The Shawshank Redemption was the best movie ever...
 

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I don't know what 'pikey' means-- it just sounds derogatory to me.

If your writing is intended to be a school report, then its English is too informal. I see no mistakes in grammar to correct, except perhaps a change to this: Morgan Freeman acted...
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Paragraph correction: I felt The Shawshank Redemption was the best movie ever... #5 (permalink) Mon Mar 31, 2008 14:00 pm   Paragraph correction: I felt The Shawshank Redemption was the best movie ever...
 

Hi Mister Micawber,

Here's some information on pikey.

Pikey is a pejorative slang term used primarily in the United Kingdom, originally referring to travellers, sometimes known as gypsys.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Pikey
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