#2 (permalink) Sun Jun 08, 2008 14:41 pm Would you be so kind and help me correcting this document? |
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Toto forum je hlavně na kratké gramatické otázky an není korekorská služba, ale tentokrát Ti pomůžu.
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Student: Bc. Tatarová Mária
Year submitted: 2008
Date of state exams: July 2008
Thesis topic: Influence of selected parameters for the energetic intensity of heating of an unenclosed family swimming pool
Location of experiment: Department of heat engineering
Thesis supervisor: prof. Ing. Václav Havelský, CSc.
Abstract:
The purpose of the thesis was to design the heating system for an unenclosed outdoor home swimming pool. In the first, theoretical chapter, the thermal heat balance of the pool is resolved, as well as the theoretical description and the right formulas for dealing with the heat losses and heat gains. In the calculation chapter heat losses and heat gains are defined. These are used for heat output in certain months of swimming season and the necessary heat output of the heating unit. For completition of the Bachelor's thesis I have added a design proposal for a solar energy system made by the Thermo/Solar company for heating the water in the pool. I have also included a calculation of the costs for this design compared to those for a conventional boiler-powered heating system. |
Nesmí se používat čárku místo apostrofu.
Slovo "economical" většinou znamená úsporný (na rozdíl od slova "economic"), takže by bylo lepší používat "financial costs", ale tím, že "costs" jsou skoro vždycky finanční, není třeba používat vůbec žadné přídavné jméno. V angličtině používáme co nejméně slov možných.
Anglicky normálně znamená "solar system" sluneční soustava a tak je lepší upřesnit, o jakou soustavu to jde, např. "solar electrical system", "solar heating system" apod. Hovorově stačí jen "solar system", když vědí všichni, o čem vlastně mluvíte.
Parkrát se stala nějaká věta asi příliš dlouhou a složitou na angličtinu a z ní jsem udělal dvě věty.
So there's your feedback from a native English speaker. |
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Jamie (K) I'm a Communicator ;-)
Joined: 24 Feb 2006 Posts: 5332 Location: Detroit, Michigan, USA
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#3 (permalink) Mon Jun 09, 2008 10:21 am Would you be so kind and help me correcting this document? |
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Jamie, Thank you so much, I really appreciate your help.
This was for my girlfrend, she's just about to finish her university.
I know this forum is not to provide services like this, I just wanted to help her and to be honest I had given it a go.
Won't do it again.
Thanks again and good luck |
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Mejcej I'm new here and I like it ;-)
Joined: 16 Jan 2007 Posts: 19 Location: Slovakia
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