My writting: On the street

[Zuzana]

My story is about 300 words. I would love to get some feedback to know the others opinion.

On the street

Did you ever realize, that there is a lot to see and hear on the street? Did it ever have happened to you, that for few minutes you have stopped on the square, sat down and listen to the people walking around you?

‘… yes, I am coming today!!!’ woman shouting at the phone and hastily passing to the next shop with clothes.

I sat down on the bench beside three girls. One of them was very pretty with ginger hair wearing very short bright dress.
‘… I know!‘ I heard her saying. ‘I was there last week. I glanced around the room and next thing I saw him coming to me with big grin on his mouth he asked me: ‘What is your phone number, baby?’ He had probably the most beautiful “deepish” voice I have ever heard, but at the same time he asked me the most stupid question, if he wanted to make a good impression. What a pity.’ the young girl groaned.
‘And what happened next?‘ another one wearing awful lot of make up whispered eagerly.
‘Did you gave it to him?’ the third one frown.
‘Of course I did not! I am not that stupid to give my number to anyone just like that!’ the girl with provocative dress muttered, but she looked very thoughtful as she would like to have it done.
‘I would! He is gorgeous, maybe little stupid but never mind ..!’ I am not really sure, which one said that, because my phone started to shout at me: ‘Yes, I am coming today!!!’ I yelled back and rushed to the next shop with clothes to buy something exciting for the party. It needs to be something sexy and very short with very deep V-neck and …

Zuzana