TOEFL® essay topic: When people succeed, it is because of hard work

[Arielle_Whiterose]

The importance of hard work in our life

From our childhood, we must learn a lot of

things as: how to sit up, how to stand up, how

to speak, how to spell, how to do these things or

how to do those things, how to survive...In

order to learn all these things, we must be hard-

working people. Then although luck also plays

an important role in our life, I still agree

that: "When people succeed, it is because of

hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success".

First and foremost, when you want to succeed,

you must be sure that:"What is your goal”. And

when you can see your goal clearly, you need to

try your best to achieve it. For example, when

one of my friends gets a good mark, most of the

others'llthink that:"She must have been hard-

working”, but few people think: "She's just so

lucky!”If she only depended on the luck, she

would get no success or would just get unreal

success.Because, the real success's only reserve

for hard-working people.

In the second place, your success'll be verified

by time, hard circumstances and difficult

problems...Your success at school are that you

can pass the exam, can have a good certificate

but If you're only the people who get these

success by depending the luck, you can't deal

with all the hard circumstances, solve all the

difficult problems and will find it very difficult to

get greater success in your real life. But if you

are a hard-working person, who has been used

to overcoming all the difficulties to get your

success, you’ll find it easier to achieve your

bigger goals in your real life as having a good

job, completing the work easily,........

Last but not least, when you have a good job by

the best of your real ability, all your colleagues'll

admire you. Your good professional ability and

your attempts can be seen clearly when you use

your profound knowledge and your experience

to deal with all the difficult problems. There are

too many specialists in the market and you'll

take the best job, the best social position when

you're the best!

In conclusion, I believe that success is what

people can have as long as they are hard

working. So only when you're hard-working, can

you become a successful person. When you

have a failure, just ask yourself first:"Do I try

my best?", "Am I hard-working?"....And when

you can answer all those questions, you’ll

become a real successful person!

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