TOEFL® essay: People should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing.

[Trangdh12]

People should sometimes do things that they don’t enjoy doing. I totally agree with this. Everybody wants to do things they like but life is complex, our actions depend on the situations we are in. Some examples in daily life will make it more clearly.

Personal habits are not always right. Students go to school and have to study many subjects, not except subject that they don’t like studying but they still have to do it. They don’t like it doesn’t mean that subject is not good. They have to study it for purposes that maybe at that time they don’t understand.

At work office, secretaries must do things that their boss demands. Certainly they include things that make them fell not uncomfortable, but it’s their job, they must do it. Or a fat man enjoys eating snacks and fast foods, things making him fatter and fatter, it’s not good for his health so he must give up eating them. It’s really hard to do but he must to.

Doing chores is a work that most teenagers not enjoy doing. They enjoy going out with friends, lying on bed and listening to music, doing some extremely actions, etc ….but they don’t want to help their parents with the housework. That must have to be changed. They have to spend a little more time helping their parents although they are not satisfied with it. They must know that their parents are working very hard to raise them up, it’s just a little thing that they can do for them. So don’t deny it because you don’t enjoy doing it!

I myself have been told to do things that I don’t like too but I still do it well. I’m sure that all of you will agree with me and remember to do things well although you don’t like it.

Can you check this essay for me, it's my very first essay so I really care about it. Thank you very much!

[Angelos_143]

I think this topic is very interesting. But I think that you agree with this topic, you should point out the reasons why people should do it. Why is it good or bad? What you said only the examples without a generel reason for every ideas!
That is my opinion. I hope what i said is good for you!

Angelos

[Hoanghuong]

In our life , there are manythings we don't want to do, but we still do it. When you was small, you had to obey what your parents told. It's evidently because you were living in your parent's upbringing.Yourparents love you and alway give you the best things, prevent you from evil society. Afterward, I'm sure that wherever you go, your parents are alway the best coach to you. But when you live in wide environment, you have to face with the social injustice, unfair attitude, being told by strange man who is not your parents at work or in public. You will do what they tell you or refuse?. whether you dare refuse to do what you don't want to do if you are the new in the jobs market?. In school, teacher order you to do somethings which make you uncomfortable, would you dare not to do?
I think, we have to endure a lot of unfair things we have seen in life. You can't change it and can't make it better by yourself.
So, everyone can choose what is good . Be alway yourself because you are lived one times in life!
Best regard!!
Minh Huong

[Noury]

hello dear,

firstly, i encourage you, and i said good try, but as you said this is essay, so you need to write your essays regarding the form which essays written with, this the first notice i had when i raed your essay, the form of IMLA, It is abbreviation.
Alaso, your topic sentence should be supported with enough controlling ideas which show the line which you will follow while you are writing your essay.

this my recommandation, i confess that i am not excellent in English, but this my actual level and this is one of the things which i have learned,
if you have any observation, please send me your feed back.
Regards,

Noury