TOEFL® Essays Samples: What changes do you think 21st century will bring?

[Kt_Tammy]

Hi all, I am a new member of the web site. I will take TOEFL exam in Oct 08.
Below is my essay example. Any comment will be highly appreciated.

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What changes do you think 21st century will bring?

In the 21st century, all nations realize that global warminmg is a critical problem which need to be resolved urgently. Scientist attempt to research and development in order to get the environmatal - friendly products. As we can see, there are many innovation which help to save the environment in the new century.

Fisrt of all, there are some advances in automobile technology. Due to the shortage of oil, automotive manufacturers tend to produce energy saving cars such as electricity and natural gas cars. The market also has the positive responses to these new models because it can help to save fuel cost for individuals and the nations.

Secondly, there is a trend to use less paper which made from wood. For instance, programmers have been developed electronic books and electronic mail applications. People can read online books and newspapers without printing paper. Also, pepople can communicate to each other with low cost of paper thourough emails.

Thirdly, recycling technology also become popular in the century. This technology can reduce the world resource consumption because many products can be reproduce and reuse. In the last few days, I read from the newspaper that there are some entrepreneurs invent furnishures from gabage and some plants can produce oil from old tyres.

In conclusion, there are serious climate chankge problems in the 21st century. They are the main drives to peolple to develop the new technology in order to save the environment such as automobile technology, electronic books application and recycling technology. Therefore, good environment can be saved for the next generation as well.

[Kaiju]

In the 21st century, all nations realize that global WARMING is a critical problem which needS to be resolved urgently. ScientistS attempt to research and DEVELOP the environmENtal - friendly products. As we can see, there are many innovationS which help to save the environment in the new century.

Fisrt of all, there are some advances in automobile technology. Due to the shortage of oil, automotive manufacturers tend to produce energy-saving cars such as CARS USING electricity and natural gas. The market also has the positive responses to these new models because THEY can help to save fuel cost for individuals and the nations.

Secondly, there is a trend to use less paper which made from wood. For instance, programmers have been developed electronic book and Email applications. People can read books and newspapers ONLINE without printing ANY paperS. Also, PEOPLE can communicate to each other with low cost THROUGH emails.

Thirdly, recycling technology also becomeS popular in the century. This technology can reduce the world resource consumption because many products can be reproduce and reuse. In the last few days, I read from the newspaperS that there WERE some entrepreneurs inventING furniTures from gabage and some plants can produce oil from old tyres.

In conclusion, there are serious climate change problems in the 21st century. They are the main drives FOR people to develop the new technology in order to save the environment such as automobile technology, electronic books applicationS and recycling technology. Therefore, good environment can be saved for the next generation as well

[Kt_Tammy]

Hi Kaiju,
Thanks for your kindness to correct my essay.