TOEFL essay samples: People do many different things to stay health.

[Angelos_143]

People do many different things to stay health. What do you do for good health?

People often say that "time is precious as gold". However, we can only triumph our time, when we own a good health.Thus, health is a extremely precious possession. What should we do to have a good health? In my opion , there are two things, that we should attach special importance: our good mind and body.

First of all, owning a good body means that we should notice our nutrition, for example, water is very necessary for our body; or fruit and vegetable provide many Vitamins, that is good for our skin and curve. We ought to know that nowaday there are many consumer brand , containing many poisonous chemical, such as saccharose, insecticide in vegatables and fruits, so on ... It causes many popular cancers and some strange diseases. To protect ourselves and our family, we should choose carefully beverages and do morning exercise everyday.

Besides that, a positive thought will make our life more pleasant. After hard-working day , we can find happy and peasant from the laughter of children. Making relationships also brings the joyfulness, for instant, a relationship between our family and the next-door family, the pinics or open-air camping of the old friends, or the time for some special friends. It makes our life have meaningful but always mysterious. In pastime, we can play or listen music , or try to join a dance class, to improve the necessary skills. We ourselves make our life easier to breathe.
In conclusion, Getting a good mind and body is the most improtant thing , to make sure of a good health.We should balance between them and don't forget the primary target. We need a happy life.

[Alan]

Hi,

My corrections are in CAPITAL letters:

People do many different things to stay healthY. What do you do for good health?

People often say that "time is AS precious as gold". However, we can only MAKE BEST USE OF our time, when we HAVE good health.Thus, health is aN extremely precious possession. What should we do to have good health? In my opiNIon , there are two things, that we should attach special importance TO: A good mind and body.

First of all, HAVING a good/HEALTHY body means that we should TAKE NOTE OF our nutrition, for example, water is very necessary for our body; or fruit and vegetable provide many Vitamins that ARE good for our skin and SHAPE. We ought to know that nowadayS there are many consumer brandS , containing many poisonous chemicalS, such as SACCHARIN, insecticide in vegEtables and fruits AND so on ... It causes many popular cancers and some strange diseases. To protect ourselves and our family, we should choose beverages CAREFULLY and do morning exercise every day.

Besides that, positive thINKING will make our life more pleasant. After A hard-working day , we can find happINESS and PLEASURE from the laughter of children. Making relationships also brings the joy, for instanCE, a relationship between our family and the next-door family, piCnics or open-air camping WITH old friends, or the time for some special friends. It makes our life meaningful but always mysterious. In OUR FREE TIME we can play or listen TO music , or try to join a dance class, to improve the necessary skills. We ourselves make our life easier to breathe.
In conclusion, Getting a good mind and body is the most impORtant thing , to make sure of agood health.We should MAKE A balance between them and NOT forget the primary target. We need a happy life.

Alan
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[Angelos_143]

Thanks Mr Alan so much!!!