Can you please help me estimate? I will be attending TOEFL on Aug 3rd...

[Rohini]

i will be attending TOEFL on aug 3rd...my recent practice test scores are from 100-103(using barrons)...can i rely that i would be getting a 100 in the main toefl?how did your scores vary from the ones of practice tests
and please friends please give me some advice on succesfully cracking speaking section...iam so tensed

[Rts]

Hi friends, i m also preparaing for ibt toefl. Can u check my essay and tell me about my score for this essay

Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants. Other people prefer to prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Every person trusts in good health, because they know very well that “Prevention is better than cure.” We need a doctor when we suffering from diseases. Many diseases will have been cured by our daily routine. Today’s the topic is on our food which we obtained either from restaurant or home. From my point of view I always prefer to eat food at home.

The first choice of many people is home made food and I always make food at home. At home we prepare food with cleanliness and our total intention is to pay attention on purity. We can use fresh vegetable, fruits, and everything we want to make. While from restaurant if we want to obtained fresh food then its does not happens. Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants; it’s not good for their health. Restaurant has many negative aspects for example in restaurant or stands food we expense more money than at home. We might be obtained adulterate food because here restaurant not pay any attention on cleanliness. Here I am not saying like that all restaurants do not notice on their hygiene, but it happens just 10%. Due to it birth of many diseases are found. When we buy any food material from restaurants then we also buy lots of diseases. For example food like pizza, burger etc which contains fatty substances. These fatty substances when go inside the body then it accumulate in our body. The accumulation is cholesterol, fat type causing many serious diseases in our body for example high B.P., fattiness, some heart diseases are also from it. More spicy food gives rise to acidity, gastric problem, ulcers etc.

On the other hand, time is very important for each and every people. Most of the people think that preparation of food at home takes more time than restaurants. They directly go to restaurant and buy anything in less time. I also realize this thing like when I am in hurry, and I have no time to make food then I go to restaurant and buy food. Though I familiar with all that think but I always prefer home made food because it makes me healthy in all sense.

So we can say that, home made food is far better than restaurant food. Everybody knows that “health is Wealth”. Our mind correctly does their work when we have a good health. If we not conscious about our health then how we can progress in any field. So we should be always takes pure food.

[Torsten]

Hi RTS,

Many thanks for joining our forum. You can improve your essay if you try to write simpler sentences that contain fewer mistakes. Some of your grammar mistakes are rather basic and I'm sure you can correct them yourself if you take a closer look at them. Here is an example: While from restaurant if we want to obtained fresh food then its does not happens.

This sentence is very difficult to understand because you are trying to use a complicated sentence structure. Break your ideas down into small portions and ask yourself what exactly you want to say.

Let me know what you think.
Regards,
Torsten
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[Alan]

Hi,

I have done a quick check on your piece to back up what Torsten has already done for you and made some amendments using CAPITAL letters:

Tue Aug 12, 2008 6:57 pm Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants. Other people prefer to p

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Hi friends, i m also preparing for ibt toefl. Can u check my essay and tell me about my score for this essay

Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants. Other people prefer to prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Every person trusts/BELIEVES in good health, because they know very well that “Prevention is better than cure.” We need a doctor when we ARE suffering from diseases. Many diseases will have been cured by our daily routine. TODAY the topic is ABOUT our food which we obtained either from A restaurant or home. From my point of view I always prefer to eat food at home.

The first choice of many people is home made food and I always make food at home. At home we prepare food with cleanliness and our total intention is to pay attention TO FRESH FOOD. We can use fresh vegetableS, fruits, and everything we want to make. While from A restaurant if we want to OBTAIN fresh food then its does not happen. Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants; it’s not good for their health. A restaurant has many negative aspects for example in A restaurant OR AT A food stand we SPEND more money than at home. We might GET adulterateD food because here A restaurant DOES not pay any attention TO cleanliness. Here I am not saying that all restaurants do not TAKE ANY notice ABOUT their hygiene, but it happens IN just 10%OF CASES AND SO many diseases are found. When we buy any food material from restaurants then we also buy lots of diseases. For example food like pizza, burger etc which contain fatty substances. These fatty substances when THEY go inside the body then THEY accumulate in our body. The accumulation is cholesterol, fat type causing many serious diseases in our body for example high B.P., OBESITY, some heart diseases are also from it. More spicy food gives rise to acidity, gastric problem, ulcers etc.

On the other hand, time is very important for each and every people. Most of the people think that preparation of food at home takes more time than IN restaurants. They directly go to A restaurant and buy anything in less time. I also realize this thing when I am in hurry, and I have no time to make food then I go to A restaurant and buy food. Though I AM familiar with all that but I always prefer home made food because it makes me healthy in all senseS.

So we can say that, home made food is far better than restaurant food. Everybody knows that “health is Wealth”. Our mind correctly does their work when we have good health. If we ARE not AWARE OF our health then how we can progress in any field. So we should always EAT pure food.

Alan
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