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[Nilam]

hi Jason,
I am a high school student and I would like to improve my writing as well. So, I gave a try writing on your one of your essay topics. Here it is -

1. Small town or big city...?

Having to wake up ever morning with the noises of cars and buses would be typical morning for some people, but for others it would be just disturbing morning. Personally, I would prefer to wake up every morning hearing the rustling of leaves and the chirping of birds. Living in small town or big city is not only matter of how you want to wake up in the morning, but what kind of lifestyle you want to adapt to.

As for me, I spent most of my childhood life in a small town. We didn't have much of fancy technology like in big cities, but our community was very close and friendly. We were always there for each other. However, I had to move to a big city to continue my study and I realized that we barely see our neighbors. It might be because life in the big city is busier then life in the small town.

Now that I live in a big busy town, I have also realized that people here works a lot. Most of my friends have more than one part-time jobs. There are variety of opportunities for people with different backgrounds. Even in education, schools have scholarships and different programs for help needed people.

Even though, there are all the facilities, in health care wise the big cities aren't that convenient. I know that it sounds a kind of ironic; a big city with poor health care, but its true. Through my observations, I have noticed that hospitals tend to have more patients, therefore doctors won't have quality time with each of his patients. In the other hand, in the small town patients can be more familiar with their doctors, since there are less population.

Living here in a big city, I have adapted to its lifestyle, but I still would rather prefer to live in a small town like in my childhood time. Therefore, life is better to make your future in big cities, but spending your future in a peaceful small town would be definitely awesome idea.

Thank you.
Please comment on my essay and find my mistakes!!!