TOEFL essay: Why is science necessary in a university?

[Guest]

According to Kant,science is organized knowledge,wisdom is organized life.It is a really wise saw,and how can we get as much chance to learn science as from the university.These cognitions may be important in our whole life,and effecting it.

First of all, we need partners to study anything,so science as well,because there are lot of problems waiting for discussion which -between classmates- is easier to acquire in university.For example,if we study astronomy,we can debate questions related to that section and also get possibility quest out new things or focusing on some special problems such as comets moving, if we want.
Students always change their knowledge between them and argue their ideas about the recent tasks. Science give a chance to get acquainted with the material world's problem.At the university,student are mature enough to discuss these things properly.

On the other hand,universities are used for people who wants to know much more about their life,not just material but may be phylosophical line as well.If they are interested in any section of science,they would be famous later if they research became important by one of sectors.
University is the better place to discover our world,and teachers or professors could help us to pick up attainments and experimential learning- which is being appeared professors- is also put up our mind higher level.

In conclusion,we need classmates and friends to study in university which brouden our field of interest and I am sure that science I got from there will help taking our knowledge better about our wider environment,and if we talented enough,we can achieve fame by our work.

[Alan]

Hi,

I've made some corrections in CAPITALS:

According to Kant,science is organized knowledge,wisdom is organized life.It is a really wise saw/SAYING? How can we get as much chance to learn science EXCEPT from the university?These cognitions/THIS KNOWLEDGE may be important in our whole life/FOR THE WHOLE OF OUR LIFE AND WILL AFFECT IT.,and effecting it.

First of all, we need partners to study anything,so DOES science as well,because there are A lot of problems waiting for discussion which -between classmates- is easier to acquire in university.For example,if we study astronomy,we can debate questions related to that section and also possibLY FIND OUT new things or CONCENTRATE on some special problems such as comets moving/THE MOVEMENT OF COMETS, if we want.
Students always EXchange their knowledge between them and argue their ideas about the recent tasks. Science giveS a chance to get acquainted with the material world's problem.At the university,studentS are mature enough to discuss these things properly.

On the other hand,universities are used for people who want to know much more about their life,not just material MATTERS but may be PHILOSOPHICAL ONES as well.If they are interested in any section of science,they would be famous later if theIR research became important FROM one of THE sectors.
University is the BEST place to discover our world,and teachers or professors could help us to pick up attainments and experimental learning- which is being appeared??professors- IT also RAISES our mind TO A higher level.

In conclusion,we need classmates and friends to study in university whO broAden our field of interest and I am sure that THE science I got from there will help MAKE our knowledge better about our wider environment,and if we ARE talented enough,we can achieve fame THROUGH our work.

Alan
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[Helen111]

Hi Alan here is a new essay , could you possibly review and give your evaluation Thank you a lot Helen

Since the television has appeared,communication among people here and there increased and elsewhere decreased.This invention became more and more important to people in the last century.There are advantages and disadvantages watching television which come up in communications among people because it can raise and reduce that depends on people's personality.Mass media can influence our behavior in our everyday life and routines and can change them if we are suggestible enough.

First of all,I do not be able to agree with this statement because television may increase communication between family members or friends if they are interested in that programme they watch,and can discuss about that.It could be news, an interesting film or a legend of a famous person.These give a good reason for arguing many ideas of own's related to the programme.It could be useful,because everybody has a chance to evolve their opinion and get different explains and theories against other's.Our point of view not always the best and we just improve our knowledge if hearing their statement of the problem.

Secondly,television-watching could contain disatvantages,why I have to agree with the statement.Some people just sitting front of the TV and do not be able to estimate the progress of time.They may lose their family or friend's attention who feel about themselves unnecessary because of the device.These people become deserved into others eye,however into their own eye not.They enjoy programmes and do not think about others aspect,moreover, do not understand why others disturb them when they watching their 'favourite' show, which- telling the truth- do not increase our knowledge of life as well.They may break off the connection with their enviroment and do not disposed to pay attention their relatives too.I think, these people need our help.

In conclusion,televison was a big invention in the last century which be able to influence people on good and bad line as well.The result of TV watching is up to us,it could improve our knowlwdge and ability to talk about with others a lot or decrease our communication and relationship with people if we leave out of consideration that television just a device.

[Fireonrocks]

Here s ur essay on science in university

Science we can say is the essence of life. science has made our lives simpler and better . I believe science is a force that exists as an eternal truth ,a vast ocean of knowledge . Making such an interesting subject a part of university program is poosibly the best oppourtunity for us to take a drop of knowledge from this vast pool of facts.

Firstly ,I would like to mention that today what we are, the lives we live ,every matter living or dead is based on science .For example,the first thing u get up in the morning n do is brush ur teeth -This fine detail of our every day activity is based on science .Universities try to impart that knowledge to their students thru this program .

Secondly,Science is an ubiquitous element of our educational system. Imagine learning things based on pure imagination .Once u r told something is true the other day it is learnt they aren t true.Living in such a situation would hve been difficult .Science makes it easy by presenting unchangeable facts and evidence about a certain topic.

Finally,i would like to add is science has provided us with a way of thinking .This way of thinking has led to amazing inventions an discoveries which would hve been impossible if it had nt been for science.For examples mobile phones to air crafts to space ships to satellites and many such inumerable things which hve become a part of our lives.

In my conclusion, these r some of the reasons i believe universities should definitely make science a part of their curriculum because what is life without its essence .

pls review this essay thnk u