Mistakes in paragraph: When my daughter born she was 6 pounds and she was...

[Gurpreet]

My Baby daughter:
When my daughter born she was 6 pounds and she was so tiny. I had my C-Section done in January. When she was born she was white and dry. First she didn't cry at all and doctors take her to a special room and gave her some sort of treatment and were trying to make her cry. At the end she cried but i didn't hear it as i was in a deep sleep. I stayed in the hospital for 3 nights and my family bring me home on 4th day. After my baby was 3 months only we went to england for a month holiday. Then we came back as my husband has to start his job soon. so he started his job 3 days after we arrived here. We found a luxury apartment with 3 bedroom,2 bathrooms and a kitchen, the good thing was that they have swimming pool in their complex. so we used to go to pool pretty much everyday. But they have closed the pool from this month and goin to reopen it next year in april. We have nothing to do now. There is a big grass area the back sides of apartments. its like a big land with grass on. there is a park behind the trees and many children come to play and to takes swings and slids too. My baby love to go to the park. She is being so naughty these days. She makes expressions and she just pretend to cry to get our attentions but she laught straight way after. Sometimes she gives us chiky smile and look. She is very active but she becomes lazy when she wants to be. We love her so much.

[Yankee]

Hi Gurpreet

I enjoyed your story. What is your daughter's name?

Here are some suggestions for improvement:

My Baby daughter:

When my daughter was born she weighed 6 pounds and she was so tiny. I had my C-Section done in January. When she was born she was white and dry (??? Was she really dry, or do you mean something like dehydrated?). At first she didn't cry at all and the doctors took her to a special room and gave her some sort of treatment and were trying to make her cry. She finally cried but I didn't hear it as I was in a deep sleep. I stayed in the hospital for 3 nights and my family brought me home on the 4th day. When my baby was only 3 months old, we went to England for a month's holiday. Then we came back as my husband had to start his job soon. He started his job 3 days after we arrived here. We found a luxury apartment with 3 bedrooms ,2 bathrooms and a kitchen. One good thing was that there is a swimming pool in the complex, so we used to go to the pool pretty much every day. Unfortunately, they have closed the pool from this month on, but will reopen it next year in April. We have nothing to do now. There is a big grassy area behind the apartments. It's like a big grassy field. There is a park behind the trees and many children go there to play and to use the swings and slide too. My baby loves to go to the park. She is being so naughty these days. She makes funny expressions and she just pretends to cry to get our attention, but afterwards she (always) laughs straight away. Sometimes she gives us a cheeky smile and look. She is very active but she can be lazy when she wants to be. We love her so much.
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Amy
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ESL teacher, and native speaker of American English

[Gurpreet]

Hi Amy

My daughters name is HARJOT means God's Light.
And i didn't mean to dry but i meant dehydrated.
Thanks for the correction and i have learnt much more from your corrections.

Gurpreet