| #1 (permalink) Thu Oct 09, 2008 5:43 am TOEFL essay: A sense of competition in children should be encouraged.
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Topic: Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Competition and co-operate have its advantages and disadvantages. If a child taught how to compete with others will become independent and be self control then when he is educated in the co-operate environment; perhaps, he will grow up as a person who is easy to communicate with others. In my point of view, we should teach our children in both sides which we just deal with above.
In the first side, we will talk about a sense of competition in children. As we see, in the competition environment our children must assert themselves, even in their little brain only have two words “win” or “lose”. They probably imagine that they are playing the game which requires a lot of effort and skill and if they “win”, they maybe get many good things in the rest of their life. Obviously, everybody including our children does not always want to “fail” when they play their game in the real life. The game perhaps will bring to them some benefits such as independent and self-confident in their character and itself maybe become an important part in their future.
In other side, co-operate mind in our life is also very important. The inner person always remains strong points and weak points. Maybe a strong point of one person is a weak point of another. Thus, combination skills among people in particular environment is necessary for the development in the future. We will learn faster and deeper when we share what we are learning with others, it makes us turn to more perfect and useful.
In a nutshell, I strongly believe that competition and co-operation have many benefits and our children should be taught both sides in order to help them being self-confident in the future. By the way encouraging and finding the good ways for our children, family and people around them will support them to make a good start when they begin to learn about competition or co-operation.
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