TOEFL® essay: The most important aspect of a job in the money a person earns

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In fact, almost people take a job to earn money. But I think the most important aspect of a job is the money a person earns is not true entirely. According to me, although money is very important for our life but it is not all.
Nobody can deny the importance of money. If you have money, you can do many things. You can pay off your personal needs or your family needs. If you have much money, you can have a comfortable life. To have money, you have to work and work hard. However, if you think the money is the most important thing, you may too concentrate on earning money. When you consider money is the number one, you may be dazzled by money. You will try hard, do work with all your time; even use all trickery to earn money. And then you commit a sin. So although money is very important, I think you had not better consider money is all.
On the other hand, what will you do with a pile of money that you spent all your time earning? The first purpose of money is serving for human life but in this case you become dependent on money. Hour and hour, day and day you do your work. You have no time to rest, relax, and have no time for your family, for your friends. You have no time to enjoy the interest things of life. Your life is cramped and then it is very boring.
Because of some above reasons, although money is very important but I think it is not all. And we not only need to know the way to earn money but also you must know the way to make harmonious between your life and your work