TOEFL® sample writting: Most people think that parents are the best teachers

[A.jooya]

Dear all,
I am going to take TOFEL test two months later. I would highly appreciate your commnt on my writting. TNX

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Parents are the best teachers. Use spesific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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Most people think that parents are the best teachers. I am the same way. The reasons why I think so go as follow.

First, They are those who have given birth to us. Therefore, inharently thay can
understand us much bether than others. Psycologysts say that more than 50% of childeren's behavior emerged from their parents behaviore. As a rusult, because of the similarity between us they can solve our problems, which may were their own problems in the past, easily. In adition, there are many criterias which are factored in teaching. Some of them are being aware of students' personality, being aware of their ability, have information about their habits and their past. I belive that if a theacher can take them into accunt he/she will be more successful. who knows them as well as our parents?

Second, the ages between 1 and 6 are the most important period of people's treaning life. the years that childeren have no teacher else than their parents. The amount of their learnings at that time is not compareable with other times. For example, out niebour has a three-year boy that has memorized Quran just in 2 months. I can't imagin to do so even in 10 years. Therefor, parents play a indisputable rolle in our futher success.

Last, but not the list, our parents are the most relyable people in this world. They have lots of experiences which we can learn a lot from them. They always do thier best to help us. They are only ones who can learn us morality.

In conclusion, parents are the best teachers in the world that teach us how to live, how to face with life's diffeculties and, the most important thing, how to love.

[Darkangel12891]

this is a good one. However, it shoud be made longer for the real independent essay requires 250-300 words. Not only that, there are still some grammar mistakes and the conclusion is too short. Thus, try your best.^&^