How can I improve my writing skills?

[savitry]

Thank you very much!
First of all, because I am preparing for Ielts, I have written some compositions about what I believe I will be asked. So I write a compositions about my town, Bucharest.

About my town

My town is a big one but is not a clean one except the center. You can find streets fool of garbage.
Beside garbage , there are many stray dogs, many roofless children, the pollution level is high, the highways are full of holes, the people are irritable and stressed. Why are the people irritable and stressed?
Because of misery, because of spoilt roads, because of agglomeration on the highways, because of a low live level.
In Bucharest there are no more than 7 big parks. There are wee places for play for children. The green places had seized of many garages and useless structures, many of it unfinished.
But the town has a better part, of course.
So here you can find many higher education institutes , many museums, churches, an Opera House, an Operetta Theatre, another many theatres. Also, here is the Patriarchate of Romanian Orthodox Church.
It is important to visit the Village Museum founded in 1936, in which specimens of traditional village architecture have been gathered from all parts of the country. Bucharest also has open spaces and stadiums for sporting events.
In my town people can have jobs in various fields: culture, education, transports, tourism, medicine, IT, arts, architecture, management, marketing and many others.
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Lucia

[Jady]

Hello,
I will also try to write sample essay. But
my English is bad...

I`ll tell you "my life in school"

I learn in National Academy of Arts - second year.
It likes me. There are many disciplines(?) like
drawing, sculpture, anatomy and perspective.
and English Language, of course, but is so
scandy -unfortunately.
My course consist of 8 students. They are so
nice and amusing young people. Actually I`m
youngest.
I and my mates often stays in the studio all
day long. There are many tools.
The programme on the next semester include
section jewellery. and I wait with impatience
new semester.
Now we are in summer vacation.

that is...
there is soooo many mistakes...
but i ll learn this language with your help... i hope so...

[savitry]

Hello Jady!
Although I can speak english not very well, I found some mistakes in your text:

"My course consist" means one course, so you must wrote : my course consists or my courses consist

Actually I`m
youngest.
I think the correct form is : I am the youngest.

I and my mates often stays
I think the correct form is : I often stay with my mates or I and my mates often stay

The programme on the next semester include
I think the correct form is : the program on the next semester includes

It is just my opinion. I am waiting for a teacher...
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Lucia

[Jady]

THANK YOU SAVITRY!
That was my first attempt.
I ll be try again and again...

[savitry]

Yes, but no teacher have any time to correct our essay and I would try to write another one. So I really hope somebody correct us.
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Lucia

[Abecedarian]

Hi,

[savitry]

Thank you too!
I was happy to see somebody try to correct my essay. About my name I was surprised to see it is familiar to you.
My name has a special story. When I was a little girl my father had read me a story about a princess. Her name was Savitry. I had put a canvas on my head and I had said I was that princess, Savitry.
So I didn't forget this scene and also I thought Savitry is a special name with a special semnification for me - my childhood, my parents.
Now I found out Savitry is an indian name. Thank you, again!
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Lucia

[Sidle Jinks]

Hi Jady!

Reading your essay, I have also found several mistakes:

[alex stream]

At the beginnig of my appearence here, i want to make some marks that to return and write essay, i consider it's very useful for second language persons, who i am.
The main objection of my studying english is ability to comunicate, and i have a great desire to work for some foreign company. My writting as well as my speaking is not appropriate for it, but I'll try to catch with my english and i can say that i have a little progress, i'm very happy. I believe I could do it!
I hope on your support and help.
PS I'll write more, because I realy need it, as I agree with this quote "Practice makes perfect"

Best Regards,
Alex from Moscow

[spearhead]

Hello everybody, my daughter has to write a short text about her hobbies. Here is the result, maybe you can tell us what you think about the text? Are there any mistakes? Thanks in advance.

In my free time I like doing a lot of different things. For example I go to the movies to see the latest films. My favourites are comedies or cartoons. Of course I also watch television. There is an interesting show on Tuesday evening about new technologies and inventions. I like that one because it is not only entertaining but also informative. I often have meet with my friend Stefanie to do practice dancing. We create our own shows and perform in Stefania's home. We even have a small fan club which contains of Stefanie's mother and her brother. I like playing other sports in my free time.
For example I sometimes go roller skating with my friends and in winter I go skiing in the mountains. When the days become shorter I also like reading in my free time. My favourite book is Harry Porter,
I have read all six parts. Maybe this is not a hobby of mine but sometimes I even help my mother with her housework. That means, I tidy up my room, vacuum clean our flat and feed my guinea pig.

[Stefanie]

[spearhead]

Hello Stefanie thank you so much for your suggestions. Aleksia (my daughter) made the changes you proposed and her English teacher asked her whether someone had helped her with her composition!

[Stefanie]

Congrat to your daughter!

[April]

What a great topic!
I need to improve my writing skills too.
I will think something up to write about and post hear. I hope a teacher'll find time to correct it.

[Gabbriela]

Hi all,
I speak very well English (in my opinion), but my written skills are awful. I never had the guts to try it. Today I sad, “Why not, every one has to start from somewhere.” So… I am here.
I’m gone have a party for my baby and I like to write this text on the invitations. What do you think about this?

Julian’s birthday is in November 24, and we want to have a party for him on November 19, at 4:30 PM. We'd like to have you and your family with us at this party. Please let us now if you can come (or if you can’t be here please give as a call at (7xx) xxx-xxxx).
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Nicole