How can I improve my writing skills?

[Sunmun]

Hi Embee, thank you for letting me know about your life in Ireland. I was born and brought up in India. Then we moved to Canada. After 7 years in Canada, we came to US. I completed my studies long ago in Canada. I am an IT professional and currently working for an US company. In Canada, education is not so expensive. You'll get different types of low interest loan for your studies. Once you start your job, you have to repay a very little amount of the loan per month.
In Canada, we lived in Toronto. It's a beautiful and very nice place to live in. But winter was terrible. Too much snow!!! It's very cold (almost -40* c) in winter. It's really difficult to drive cars. Here weather is good. There is snow in the winter, but not so harsh. Moreover US economy is far better than Canadian economy- more job, more money and less tax. Cost of living in US is much cheaper than Canada, at the same time standard of living is very high. How is the economy in Ireland? Why did you move to Ireland. Is there lots of job opportunities? Please write to me in details. Keep in touch.................

[Khaidar]

Hello!My name is Khaidar.I'm from Kazakhstan and I will have a TOEFL exam(ibt) on December.I would be grateful if you please help me on this.Because,I really afraid of writing.

It had been long, since first gasolina powered vehicle was invented. It made a big step forward in life of everyone in the world. However, it has huge feedbacks. Walking by the street, you will see a big amount of cars. Is it real progress or we just destroying our nature and ourselves?Do you think we do enough for saving our green planet called earth?It is a puzzle,isn't it? Ozone layer of the atmosphere getting tiny, temperature of the earth getting higher, we keep to destroy the forests and so forth.And the worst thing is ordinary people even do not think about it. They buy huge cars, throw garbage everywhere and don't think about what they will leave to their children.
On the other hand, it is impossible to live without cars, papers and plastic things.And of course,you can say I don't care, it is the problem of the scientists and politicians.But, I want to respond to this that we are responsible for the future. If we won't care, nobody will care.I just want you to be more serious.We have to be the main reason why our goverment takes different programs in order to save our planet.We have to try to use electric powered cars and give our garbage to the recycling companies.It is possible and it will not take so much effort from us.
To conclude, I want to say that it is our planet and as the only creatures which have mind we are responsible for what is going on with it.Please, don't be egoistic because our descendants will judge us by our decisions and actions.

[Msohag10]

I strongly belive that practice will help a lot to improve the writing skill. So we should try our best to spend more time practice writing with different issues.

[Msohag10]

I am from Bangladesh. I am a graduate in microbiology. I want to study in Canada or USA because these two country provide best facilities for education and almost all students get scholarship to maintain education expense. So students have not to be worried about their tuition fee or daily expendeture. Students can concentrated their full time in their academic curiculamcurriculum. ThatsThat’s why the average standard of the students of those country is quite better than the other. All these made the grade of the colledgecollege very high and most of the top raking colledge are from this country. If I really get opportunity to study in on of the school of thsestheses these two country, I will be really lucky and I will try my best to express my talent.

[Zhangbaixiang]

Hope you can correct my mistakes.

Yesterday I had a long chat with my early lover whom I haven't seen for almost twenty years, thanks to the internet, I got her information and added her through a net chat tool.

We had been primary classmates for six years, unfortunately, as I was a very shy boy at that time, even now still is, we haven't talk to each other more than one word. But her pretty and wisdom and good temper attracted me since I can feel what is love. As years passed on, we graduated from primary school and went to different middle school in June, 1991, from when we haven't made any contact. During that time I tried to get the news about her from the people living nearby her house, and I also lost myself as a middle student.

Now we all married and had child, but when I remembered my childhood I always can't help missing her deeply, so through the internet i searched her name times and times again, thanks to god, many years' attempts paid me off yesterday.

Before then, I have prepared many words for her and the way to express my feeling about her, (she even don't know my one-side miss for her), but I didn't express too much yesterday, because I know I have to take responsibility for both her and my own family. It's all had been gone, nomatter how sad I feel, I have to face the reality with cleared thought.

But for this girl in my heart I just want to say something here that Since it was me who didn't take action when the chance were in my hand, I accept the result regardless how sorrow it was for me, and for the destiny of mine own I really want you konw that if I could restart again I will definetely not behave as what I did twenty years ago.
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I have a dream and I want to know the secret of time and universe.

[Sonia*]

Hello Torsten.
Please review my submission.I wrote a few lines on the topic "The Park" as I was asked what I usually do at park.Please, I need feedback.

"The park is one of my favourite places.My father taught me the importance of the park in our life.I have been spending most of my time in the park usually in the morning and evening both.This is an unbeatable place for me where I feel relax and fully away from the noises of the city.I mostly do Yoga and Meditation in the park.Spending time in the park rejuvenate me to a very greate extend.Rarely I play any sport there.I do not read anything there.The thing that touches my heart there is that I find ubiquitous peace everywhere in the park.I have been visiting there since I was in the third standard.After coming back from there I find myself rejuvenated and satisfied with my life.I consider myself fortuitous enough because I understand the necessity of the park in my life and it also help me to keep me mentally and physically fit."

I shall be very thankful to you.

sonia*

[Rida*]

hi sir,
please correct my short peace of writing.
i often think that why do people of different countries have grudge for one another,why they always try to let down and try to win in the race of life over the other,instead we should console and share the grief of others.in this world it seems that it has become a materalistic world where every one is hankering after wealth and has forgot the morals of life.
thanks a lot.

[Rida*]

hi torsten,
i like to ask that i want my writings to be corrected by a teacher in this forum,but i don,t know where to post them.please help me and guide me where i should post my writings,thanks

[TheGabriel]

[Incyc70]

I made this up really fast so i didn't get to edit this, also i did it at night, so the ending is pretty bad, and i didn't want to go on with this topic, because i haven't thought it out yet. So please comment on structure grammar and whatever. Ty
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World Peace?
When I was still in kindergarten, whenever I hear someone make a birthday
wish,and it is for world peace; I ask myself. How is world peace attainable?
How can we achieve world peace? What is world peace? World peace can be viewed as very different
goals. For example, world peace can be seen as everyone gets along and there's no
more hatred in our lives. This can be seen as the most optimistic goal, but however
is it possible to achieve this kind of peace? This goal may be a bit bizzare, because
the will to fight each other doesn't come from how our children are raised or what they
are taught in school; but instead it come genetically.
History is our greatest tool, to display to our generations how humans evolved.
Over the course of history, war has been the most commonly seen event, for all
civilizations. Surely most of the civilizations teach their children to be peaceful,
and kind to most other people. But does this really differ from the teachings we give
to our children today? We, as human beings need to recignise that we are just born like
this; violence is in our nature, absolutely not in everyone's nature, but in many.
We shouldn't picture our goal as world peace because it is simply inattainable.

[Jytsamu]

hello frnds
i m again an aspirant like u....... looking forward to tame a foreign language.m preparing for toefl too.exam scheduled this year only.so have to post here almost daily.

today wanna write an essay "my best teacher"

woods are lovely dark and deep,but miles to go before i sleep-with these lines a new teacher marked her entrance when i was still in viii standard.at first she appeared to me as an stern soul.but it was only later that i realized that she is one who had contributed most in my life.
earlier i thought that science is not my cup of tea.i was convinced by the fact that only bookworms can dare to peep in this subjects.my grades were pathetic.i thought why they are teaching me,when other's(scientist) have invented/discovered without any such teaching.so why my teachers dont encourage us to invent or discover more than -what our book imbibes.
mrs. lily was a charismatic teacher and a learned philosopher to me.she had a beautiful style of talking interdisciplinary while taking up any subject.she would take a safari to the jungle,while teaching us about the Darwin theory of evolution.that period use to be a mesmerizing one for most of us.
yeah but bookworm still would charge her for simply wasting the precious cramming time.as a matter of fact she usually fall short of periods to finish up the course.but what ever she taught us,be it about her experience in a plane crash or her playing the evolution movies in the class-all went by heart.
she also use to award us with various live assignments.these comprises of perils of global warming,effects of globalization,aid for scientific research ,sustainable development.we use to collect relevant information and hen use to synthesize that.these excrsizs gave wings to our imaginations.
a true teacher is the one who dont teach but let his/her students decide about what is being right and whats wrong.as the world is not black and white,thus all things and beings are beyond such comparisons of good or bad. shakespear had once said-nothing is good or bad,its our thinking that makes it so.
a teacher can be a mere guide on the path called life.and we remember only such few teachers.

frnds let me know....
how do u like/or dislike this essay!

[Torsten]

Hi,

Thanks a lot for posting your essay. Before you ask us to evaluate it would be great if you could remove all the typos, spelling errors and punctuation mistakes contained in your post. These links will help you:
http://www.english-test.net/community/index.html#How_can_I_improve_my_writing_skills
Are you able to use a spell checker? As a TOEFL candidate you should be!

TOEIC listening, photographs: Playing with a ball

[Bhap]

Letter : last week you were on a flight to London unfortunately when you left the plane you left you bag. You did not remember the bag until you got to your hotel.

Write a letter to the airline explain what has happened, describe the bag and its content and say what you would like them to do about it.

Dear sir/madam

I am writing this letter because I have lost my bag in the plane of your company. I was returning from Boston on 23 december 2009, in flight number BS123. Unfortunately I was sleeping when plane landed I woke in haste and leave the plane. I forgot the bag which was lied under my seat.

I will explain you about my bag that may be helpful in searching. My bag is brand new and of red leather with golden buckles. Brand name is embossed on the back of the bag. My bag contains my research papers which I did in the Boston and very precious for my thesis. It also contains a paper back book and some of the photographs.

I want to request the lost property department of your company to find my bag as soon as possible and contact me at hotel’s contact number(2334556).

Thanks in advance. I hope to hear from you soon.

Your’s sincerely
Bhap

[Ahmed Gazal]

Hello !!
I am here to improve my written communication. please help me out in this. I am Gazal from Bangalore. India, I am really putting lot of efforts to improve my written communication... but I dont have any one to correct my written passages. Will any body help me out in this?

i will be very grateful..

[Ahmed Gazal]

Hello Torsten,

I am really very impressed with your replies as well as your explanation for each query. Torsten I really want to improve my written English. Please help me out. In fact I am reading English books, working on grammar, Now i have decided that everyday I will write one passage on any topic and post it on this wonderful forum. Please help me to correct my passage