How can I improve my writing skills?

[my_am]

me too - i've been waiting for a reply ever since i posted it ...

[Stanciu]

Well I shall post one of my essays here and I need a properly correction frome Torsten or Allan so please read it carefuly and say me if it's good enough :

So here it is ( this essay is one of my thoughts about humanity and foolishness)

Here I am in one of the biggest cityes of my country thinking about humanity and foolishness ( don't worry you are not included in this "humanity").
Lately i've started to think about these two things that are starting to have more and more common elements. First I am upset because of the people who think that they are the best without being very good in one domain because when you are very good in one thing and that thing is importat for other people you're not arrogant and selfish. This is the first step in being a complete fool (to be arrogant ) .
The 2nd step is to start claiming that you are easygoing (but actually to be very interested in being in the center of the attention).
Of course the minimal number of steps that you must do in order to become a complete fool is three. So the 3 nd step is to completely denie that you are fool and to start hating your fool comarades.
If I would describe to you all the things that you can do to become a full fool you would think that I am an idiot but I am not!
Seriously I am just trying to pay your attention in a problem that becomes worster and worster : the bond between humanity and foolishness .
Let's look a bit at our friends , the animals . They are not fool . They act instinctively and even if they are doing wreckless things they've managed to survive to the huge wave of foolishness that came from the humans because these nasty brainy creatures are not so smart to think about their own mistakes. Instead of doing this they are trying to take over the world(here is just a little bit exaggerated )
Finaly the bond between humanity and foolishness is that the humans have the stupidity in their esence and they are not trying to get rid of it and this is a very grave thing but I 'll tell you some more next time because now I am a sleepyhead.

So how was it like? DId you like it? Tell me your opinion please!

[Torsten]

Hi Stanciu,

Many thanks for posting your essay. The first step you should do is remove redundant spaces and spell check your text.

Regards,
Torsten
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[Stanciu]

Dear Torsten please excuse my spelling mistakes . I tried to correct some of them but I am not quite sure if I managed to "fix" all of them . Could zou help me please?? Sorry for disturbing you!

Regards

[Torsten]

Hi Stanciu, do you know how to use a spell checker? You can download and install Firefox, an add the spell checker. It's a very handy tool, just try it out.
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[quan11287]

Dear teachers,

Could you please help me correct this piece of writing? Thank you a lot
"Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? One should never judge a person by external appearances. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer".

How to assess an individual appropriately has been a thorny question puzzling human society for generations. A number of opinions claim that external appearance is the most effective means to judge a person. However, I completely disapprove of that biased point of view. This piece of writing will thoroughly clarify the rationale for my perspective.
The very first reason for my opposition to the appearance-based-judgment on people is the changeability of human look. Thanks to modern world’s achievements such as plastic surgery, cosmetics, fashionable clothes etc., an individual is totally capable of faking an outside appearance at his or her discretion. An ugly woman could be easily turned into a beauty following a costly plastic surgery. An emerging singeress whose look proves to be modest would become an extremely attractive idol on the stage should she take full advantage of available cosmetics. A young girl who hails from the countryside would quickly get an urban and stylish appearance when dressing up fashionably. Indeed, appearance is evidently not a trusted means to evaluate an individual.
Worse, judging people based on external appearances is able to cause unexpected repercussions. A person who only pays attention to opposite people’s outside looks risks missing opportunities to deal with amiable people and being deceived by wrongdoers. A businessman would probably find himself throwing away a lucrative deal if he despises a crucial business partner just because this person does not dress up luxuriously. On the contrary, in numerous frauds, a large number of victims usually witness their huge amounts of money disappear at the hand of good-looking miscreants who deliberately put on expensive clothes and accessories. Thus, assessing people based on external appearances is undoubtedly capable of inflicting adverse losses.
In conclusion, judging individuals on the basis of outside looks is undeniably an untrusted and detrimental stance. Therefore, almost all people are strongly recommended to further scrutinize other inner qualities of opposite persons other than external appearances.