TOEFL® essay: Why people attend college or university?

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People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

I believe that people attend college or university is not only to persue higher education. Other than this purpose of getting recognized degree and make preparation for future career, people attend college or university might caused by many reasons.

Since very long time ago, college or university has been setting up. The structual and rule of education have been formed as a systematic and orderingly way. Students could rely on this systematic college or university to apply programmes or professional courses. Efficiently service and smooth process flow benefit to students concentrate on their studying. It would lessen their time to evaluate or doubt on the professional academic.

In college or university, people not only learn from their own major subject. There are many interesting field subjects open to all students. For example, a student who major in IT could have more opportunities to enroll in others non-related IT programmes. It might help to enhance student common sense or knowledge in other domains. Variety of learning increase the interesting of learning. Adequately facilities are available in college or university. Students can enjoy the systematic learning environment. They can learn from classmates or professors on how to integrate knowledge or apply it in our daily life as well.

College or university is a resourceful place. We can obtain more knowledge from library or make use of the advanced facilities or equipments in laboratory, sports stadium, canteen or bookstores in campus. In this best conditions, students who are studying chemistry or physics subjects might save a lot of time or money in doing their researh or experiment. These resourceful environment definetely benefit to people and help them to search for increased knowledge.

Nowadays, a college or university education is a basic requirement for many professional companies. If someone wants to work in a professional industry like court, engineering, medical or science and other respectable fields, you have to finish the prerequisite bachelor degree first. We are trained by formal education in 3 or 4 years. In future career, it would result in a more mature employee. In another hand, more education can earn more money and lower unemployment. I believe that earning increase and unemployment decreases with additional years of education. If you are a hardworking person and having few years of working experience, you would have more opportunities to promote or given more challenging tasks.

Nevertheless, college or university is a place for us to form our personalities. Students have opportunities to participate in different kind of curriculum plans or involve in team work project or researching studies. Students can learn how create our own way to study or work with professional person. College or university also creates a good environment to students for enhancing their healthy lifestyle. There are some activities or curriculum programs can make student socialize with others, for instance, sport activities, organize raising fund or helding small gathering.

Education is very important. Good education could make a country continues grow and prosper. Higher educators meet the demands of increasing global economic. People attend college or university to accept more higher education, it builds up a person's abilities in order to address more complicated work task. People learn how to read a complex content and consice it into simple. Professional knowledge need to be delivering in a simple way. Beyonds than accumulated knowledge, higher education can make a people how to analysis problem and criticise an issue.

In sum, people attend college or university is not only to accumulate knowledge but also to help us have a productive and happy life.

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