TOEFL® essay: Some people prefer to cook at home. Other people prefer to eat out.

[Pennyyeoh]

For preparing TOELF exam, I am practising my writing skill.
Please help to check this essay.
Your response would be very appreciated.
Mank thanks! :)

Some people prefer to cook at home. Other people prefer to eat out. Which do you prefer?

Nowadays, food is accessible everywhere. People are busy in persuing their careers and have no time to cook a proper meal at home. If we are not staying with our parents, most of us would not spend much time in the kitchen to prepare a meal. People will think that how much time to spend for the tedious work in kitchen.

I started to cook at home since last year. There are few reasons I perfer cook at home.

Firstly, I started to train for conquering the highest Mountain Kota Kinabalu of Malaysia in year 2007. I prepared healthier food to reduce taking oily food. Hence, I know what I am eating when I prepare the food by myself. Well controlling intake healthier food did benefit to my trainning. My body felt light, energetic and not easy to get fatigue.

Secondly, cooking has become another new hobby during my leisure time. In weekend, I enjoy to spend my time in the kitchen to clean the fresh vegetable or marinate the meat. Cooking definetely is an art work. Everyone has his/her own style to prepare. It stirs up our creative to make a different dishes from others. Once the food was prepared on the table, sometimes I will invite my family or friends to share the dishes. Receiving compliments from other always cheer up my day and I would like to sharpen my cooking skills by this motivation.

Third, I prefer cook at home because of saving money. Compare to eating out, self-prepared can save about 40% from my montly expenses in food. I was easily tempting by the nice aromatic and well decorative food from outside. When I pass by those restaurants or shops in the moment of hunger. It makes me over spend my money on uneccessary and unhealty snack food. I remember that the way to reach an ideal weight - Eat to live, not live to eat. Since I understood how was the unnatural and processed food being sold in the market. I rather choose fresh food instead of processed food. Processed food might harm our nature body system and gradually store toxic in our body as well. Therefore, it is absolutely worthy of spending more time to cook at home than eat out.

Fourth, if I cook at home I have to buy some ingredient from supermarket or wet market. Rampling around the market and making new friends in the tranditional wet market is another interesting part. I learn how choose fresh vegetable or meat from market. This is another part of joyous moment to accumulate knowledge about food. I am enjoying to see the green vegetables and colourful fresh fruits display in the market. Reading the ingredient details is another way to learn how to decide to buy a healthier food among all the food display on the racks.

Lastly, I did enjoy to cook at home and eating lots of great tasting food that guarantees my favorable low cholesterol, freedom from heart disease, protection from cancer, and maintain my youthful vitality into my later years. I have learned that good health is our greatest wealth.

P/S: If you found any mistake from this essay, please do not hestitate and feel free to correct me. Many thanks!

TOEFL listening lectures: A lecture from a social sciences class (3)

[Yassin]

hello,

myself im going to prepare for toefl, and writting skill is crucial that s why we should practice and attempt to write a lot of essays, it is not aa motter what it is the topic that should be write on ,but the case is to learn how to develope our essay and how good it is organized.

I think that the way you are depending on is very nice because you write and send the topic to the forum in order to be evaluated.

I should not correct your essay because im not proffessionel but to some extent i can say that your essay is very good and im realy imressed by your manner of writing.

good luck

[Happytofita]

Firstly, secondly, thirdly, lastly. Fourthly is unusual. I think you'd better write first, second, third, and fourth. I do not think it is good to start with firstly, secondly, thirdly, and then write fourth.

Godd luck