TOEFL® essay: Education is the most important factor in the development of...

[Darkangel12891]

Nowadays, with the high growing of worldwide economy, talented people are extremely needed for all countries in order to develop its economy in such many fields of life. Thus, in my opinion, I totally agree that education is now becoming the most important factor in the development of developing countries and give these following reasons for why this is true.

Firstly, although not all people are required to graduate from prestigious universities for achieving their goal because they can learn from their own experience themselves. However, almost people who get high position in society must prepare good knowledge fundament. Why I say this is because people must have enough information about what they should do so that it's much easier for them to succeed in life. For instance, two men both participate in business but one who get the better education will anticipate the market, currency system ,etc much better than the other, who just make business as the instinct view. Thus, education helps people get the access to chances or their countries either

Secondly, education not only gives people knowledge but also orients human dignity. How can our country develop if there are many of social crime such as murder, bank robbery ,etc.. Everyone has good and bad characteristics and it is education that can develop the better ones,thus provides our society with good citizens who will contribute to developing the country.

In conclusion, among many things needed for developing our country, thanks to what education has dedicated to our past, present and future that we 've gotten our achievement today so that i think education should be considered the most important factor in the development of our developing country.
All comments are quitely valuable for me. Thank so much.^&^

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[Gray]

Hi Angel,

You are repeating the same mistakes again. I noted similar mistakes in another essay written by you.
If you find it convenient, you could voice me at my skype id gray10i. Reviewing your essays would be much
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~Gray.
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