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[Mirsepasi]

Dear mister Micawber, i tried to correct it but as you see the words is less than 150 and the third part is omitted ((say what you want the manager to do)) please coorect me.
Dear sir or Madam,
I am writing to complain about the service I received from your store. Yesterday I brought my computer to your establishment to instal the new program on it, when I explained about my order to your clerk , she didn’t listen carefully and started to work on my computer. When I came back home and worked on my computer, I found that none of the new programs had run and all the information were stored on it were deleted. I took it to your store again the same day and explained the problem to the clerk, but she did not pay any attention to my trouble. When I asked her to check my computer again she didn’t answer gently and I left the shop.
I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with your employee attitude and customer service.
Faithfully yours,
Alireza Mirsepasi

[Mister Micawber]

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Well, I guess you should add the part about what you want the manager to do.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to complain about the service I received from your store. Yesterday I brought my computer to your establishment to install new programs on it, but when I explained my order to your clerk, she didn’t listen carefully and started to work on my computer anyway. When I came back home with my computer, I found that none of the new programs would run and all the information that was stored on it had been deleted. I took it to your store again the same day and explained the problem to the clerk, but she did not pay any attention. When I asked her to check my computer again she responded rudely, and I left the shop.

I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with your employee's attitude and your poor customer service.

Faithfully yours,
Alireza Mirsepasi
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Native English teacher at Mister Micawber's

[Mirsepasi]

thanks a lot miMister Micawber,

[Mirsepasi]

Hi Mister Micawber, please correct me in this essay,
Children’ leisure activities
Some people believe that children’s leisure activities must be educational, otherwise they are a complete waste of time.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience.

Different people will give different response to this question from their own characters, emotional concerns and even educational backgrounds. However when it comes to me, I believe that nowadays children spend so much time at school and attend various additional classes and sometimes they need to spend their leisure activities without educational base.

In the first place, the parents think playing is a learning process. Needless to say children are much creative than most of us. They still have a blank and original mind, they just use their own eyes to watch the world and use their ways to explore the world, while playing together with other kids, they can practically learn many things, such as how to cooperate with others and to help others. While playing with pets, they will how to take care of them, and learn to take care of other people as well. Moreover even computer games can be very good. Sometimes not only their leisure activities without educational base do not waste their time but also fill it with full of beneficial things.

In the second place, when parents think of school study, they think of textbooks and exam that is to say children have to do a lot of homework to practice what their kids learn at school and they have to memorize a lot of knowledge in order to get good scores.
These parents when want to buy a toy for their children they think it should has a educational effect on them or games have to make brain work. They think youngsters should do only those activities that benefit their knowledge and educate them and unattended kid hardly makes proper use of his leisure time even on holiday.
For instance , as a teacher I have seen the result of this point of view, children are deprived of enjoyment of their childhood years and their desire to play. The children who are not allowed to play and are forced to study can begin to detest the education process and the teachers.

In conclusion I would like to point out that, always leisure activities should not be educational. Education through fun is useful but children must have some free times to relax so that their enjoyment of childhood that is once in a lifetime would not be prevented.

[Mirsepasi]

happy new year, mister micawber

[Mister Micawber]

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I have underlined some problem areas:

Children’ leisure activities

Different people will give different response to this question (What question? Remember that the question is not to be considered part of the essay) from their own characters, emotional concerns and even educational backgrounds. However when it comes to me, I believe that nowadays children spend so much time at school and attend various additional classes and sometimes they need to spend their leisure activities without educational base.

In the first place, the parents think playing is a learning process. Needless to say children are much creative than most of us. They still have a blank and original mind, they just use their own eyes to watch the world and use their ways to explore the world, while playing together with other kids, they can practically learn many things, such as how to cooperate with others and to help others. While playing with pets, they will how to take care of them, and learn to take care of other people as well. Moreover even computer games can be very good. Sometimes not only their leisure activities without educational base do not waste their time but also fill it with full of beneficial things.

In the second place, when parents think of school study, they think of textbooks and exam that is to say children have to do a lot of homework to practice what their kids learn at school and they have to memorize a lot of knowledge in order to get good scores.
These parents when want to buy a toy for their children they think it should has a educational effect on them or games have to make brain work. They think youngsters should do only those activities that benefit their knowledge and educate them and unattended kid hardly makes proper use of his leisure time even on holiday.
For instance , as a teacher I have seen the result of this point of view, children are deprived of enjoyment of their childhood years and their desire to play. The children who are not allowed to play and are forced to study can begin to detest the education process and the teachers.

In conclusion I would like to point out that, always leisure activities should not be educational. Education through fun is useful but children must have some free times to relax so that their enjoyment of childhood that is once in a lifetime would not be prevented.
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Native English teacher at Mister Micawber's

[Mirsepasi]

thanks Mister Micawber, please correct this letter with many thanks,
Write a letter to a college Principal, where you attended one day computer course and are unhappy about the way it was conducted. Explain the type of course, what happened and what can be done that it never happen again

Dear Sir or Madam,

I attended the computer course which was run at your college on February 12th, and now I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the inappropriate job that your employees did.

I have been studying computer programming at West Union College and I am looking for more good extracurricular activities in order to improve my knowledge. When I saw your advertisement on February 10th in the Times , I thought that this one day course could promote my computer information, and so I enrolled in the course on February 11th. According to your guide, the course was expected to start one day after registration and it was scheduled to begin at 8 a.m and finish at 6 p.m in the same day. I was at your college at half past seven, but the door was opened at 9 a.m and the course started at half past nine. The teacher could not control the class and all of the students talk to each other loudly. She did not have not adequate experience to teach computer programming as she herself mentioned so and it was so strange for me.

I strongly suggest that you should prevent wasting the time of students like me. Please try to select the most knowledgeable teachers for your college and manage all things properly before the start the new courses.

[Mister Micawber]

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Getting better. I have underlined some problem areas:


Dear Sir or Madam,

I attended the computer course which was run at your college on February 12th, and now I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the inappropriate job that your employees did.

I have been studying computer programming at West Union College and I am looking for more good extracurricular activities in order to improve my knowledge. When I saw your advertisement on February 10th in the Times, I thought that this one day course could promote my computer information, and so I enrolled in the course on February 11th. According to your guide, the course was expected to start one day after registration and it was scheduled to begin at 8 a.m and finish at 6 p.m in the same day. I was at your college at half past seven, but the door was opened at 9 a.m and the course started at half past nine. The teacher could not control the class and all of the students talk to each other loudly. She did not have not adequate experience to teach computer programming as she herself mentioned so and it was so strange for me.

I strongly suggest that you should prevent wasting the time of students like me. Please try to select the most knowledgeable teachers for your college and manage all things properly before the start the new courses.
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_________________
Native English teacher at Mister Micawber's

[Mirsepasi]

thanks so much. I tried to correct my problems, please check it.
Dear Sir or Madam,

I attended the computer course which was run at your college on February 12th, and now I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the inappropriate job that your employees did.

I have been studying computer programming at West Union College and I am looking for more good extracurricular activities in order to improve my knowledge. When I saw your advertisement on February 10th in the Times, I thought that this course could improve my computer knowledge , and so I enrolled in the course on February 11th. According to your guide, the course was expected to start one day after enrollment, it was scheduled to begin at 8 in the morning and finish at 18 the same day. I was at your college at half past seven, but the door was opened at 9 and the course started at half past nine. The teacher could not control her class and all of the students speak each other loudly. She did not have any adequate experience to teach computer programming as she herself mentioned , it was a complete surprise to me.

I strongly suggest that you should prevent wasting the time of students like me. Please try to select the most knowledgeable teachers for your college and manage all things properly before beging of new courses.
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[Mister Micawber]

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Good.

enrollment; it

at 6 pm the same day.

the students spoke to each other loudly.

experience teaching

programming, as

mentioned; it

before beginning new courses
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Native English teacher at Mister Micawber's

[Mirsepasi]

thank you Mister MIccawber, I am proud of my coach.

[Mirsepasi]

Mister Micawber, please correct this essay, with many thanks.
Young people nowadays tend to be less polite and respectful than in the past. What do you think are the reasons for this situiation, discuss and suggest solution.
Why are young people impolite today? Different people will give different responses to this matter due to their own character, emotional concerns, and even educational backgrounds. However, when it comes to me, I believe that the reasons for bad behavior among the youth may be that adults and parents, who are responsible for bringing up their children, have not done their job as well as people in the past.
First off, nowadays most parents are so busy that they cannot spend plenty of time at home, so they think that this lack of spending time with their children can be rectified by buying material things for them. These parents have always given their children what they wanted, as well as allowed them to do what they wanted. Frankly speaking, with this method, can we expect young people to be polite?
For instance, in a large number of modern countries, parents give their teenage children a car as a present, although, in the past, youngsters would have to work hard to try and get something valuable like a car.
Secondly, parents who want to advise their children, do not know how to do it in a comfortable way. They usually tell their children directly, whether something is good or bad and whether they should do something or not.
This method will make young people and adults have opposing views. Young people always want to try new things and find solutions for problems through their own experiences.
In conclusion, I would like to point out that we should not forget that a person’s behavior can be traced back to his or her formative years. If we would like to have more polite and respectful young people, we should broaden their horizons and change our own attitudes. I believe that the solution to the problem lies with the adults.

[Mister Micawber]

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I have underlined some problem phrasing and deleted wasted words:

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Why are young people impolite today? The reasons for bad behavior among the youth may be that adults and parents, who are responsible for bringing up their children, have not done their job as well as people in the past.

First off, nowadays most parents are so busy that they cannot spend plenty of time at home, so they think that this lack can be rectified by buying things for them. These parents have always given their children what they wanted, as well as allowed them to do what they wanted. Frankly speaking, with this method, can we expect young people to be polite? For instance, in many modern countries, parents give their teenage children a car as a present, although, in the past, youngsters would have to work hard to try and get one.

Secondly, parents who want to advise their children do not know how to do it in a comfortable way. They usually tell their children directly whether something is good or bad and whether they should do something or not. This method will make young people and adults hold opposing views. Young people always want to try new things and find solutions for problems through their own experiences.

In conclusion, we should not forget that a person’s behavior can be traced back to his or her formative years. If we would like to have more polite and respectful young people, we should broaden their horizons and change our own attitudes. The solution to the problem lies with the adults.
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Native English teacher at Mister Micawber's