TOEFL® essay: Many people believe that it is very important to make large amounts

[Olivia]

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toefl essay: Many people believe that it is very important to make large amounts of money,while others are satisfied to earn a comfortable living. Analyze each viewpoint and take a stand. give specific reasons for your position.

Making large amounts of money is never an easy issue.definitily ,making money is a very important thing for one person's life ,bacause we need foods and clothes for living ,but all these things are not free for us ,they had to be purchased from the market . when we are ill ,we also may capable of seeing docotor with expense to help us find a way to recoverd soon. while ,the supportors of this view point that earning huge amounts of money is much more important things than others.Needless to say ,making a wealth is a complicated procession involving efforts and fortunations,few people can be able to handle the mastery of them to succeed in owning huge mounts of money.therefore,if it's a easy thing,there isn't wealth or poor in the world.
on contrast,from other people's point of view,they would like to make a comfortable life rather than earn huge mount of money. it's undenied fact that a comfortable living includs of a peaceful mood, relax enviorment and happy family. we own these conditions may be not mean that own huge amounts of money,even we are normal level of income ,but we can be able to stay with closed relatives together and enjoy flexible vacations. It's a real happiness for life.
In my experience,I prefer to persue a comfortable life ,instead of earning huge amounts of money. For a instance, a famous actress ,who uesd to agree with the prior point, made a decision that she would give up her career as a actress,instead,be a business woman. Several years later,she succeeded to be the president of multipal companies and owned lots and lots of money.but this success was not able to make her life better, because she got cancer and no chance to recover even with the most expensive cural methods.
Nevertheless,we should clearly realize what is happy life for us? money or comfortable living? undoubtfully, making a comfortable living means more happy life for us than that one.From the example above, we know that happiness doesn't money ,not everything can be bought by money,especially,health or happiness.As a conclusion,we should make our lives more comfortable,not only improving the quality for substance ,but also supplying the various needs for psychology

[GreenParadise]

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Each person around the world has its own viewpoint about his or her lifestyle. Some think that collect large amount of money and become wealth is the most important thing. On other hand, some think that just make comfortable living even with less amount of money is the best thing. However, I think each viewpoint has its own advantages and disadvantages.

In fact, those who believe that the money is most important, they will spend most of their life to work hard and plan for collecting money. Even, if this will harm some vital fundamentals of happy life. For example, they may not concern to their health, and feel that the time for checking themselves at hospital will make them loss money. Thus, they will not care until the shocked with the fact that they cannot do their works and more works will cause them died. Moreover, they may lose their family, friends and other social life. However, I agree that the Money is important, but if it is not effect other life fundamentals.

On other hand, those who believe that comfortable living is right type of life style, have a good social relationship and happy family. This is because they think that the money is the tool to be a happy not the aim. So, they collect the money they need it to spend it on their life. Usually, they are not hesitated to help other. Thus, I feel those people have the right concept about happy life.

In conclusion, I think that comfortable living is my believe for good lifestyle. This is because it covers all fundamentals of life without effect each other.

[Successfpgee]

Many people who believe making large amount of money ,and people who are satisfied to earn enough money to live comfortable living are two sets of people with two different view to see life.
People who make large amount of money want to acquire things for their luxuries and comforts.No matter what, this set of people wants to acquire not only quantity but also quality of life with the sum of incoming money.
Making more money brings more comforts,but in that process people change so many jobs for better pay for making more money,this involves mental tensions,new challenges.With this sometime their health can effect and ultimatly deterioate,for some in this process they have a higher percentage of chances of getting depressed when they don't make as much money as they did in their previous job.
People believe making large amount of money can have a peaceful retirement,as they have enough resources and bank balances to rely upon.And they can spend for health related issues in old age with the money they earned and backed up.
In contrast to above,if we see people who make enough money which they think they can have comfortable life are more satisfied with the way their life prospectives are looked into.As they fully satisfied with the pay and the amount of money they are earning for a comfortable life,there are few chances of getting health problems due to depression and other mental illness which are commonly seen in individuals who are in process of procurring a large sum of money.
I take my stand with people who make comfortable living,as i feel "Health is Wealth",If you are happy mentally you are happy physically.

[Zara Woman]

Every person attitude towards money in very different ways. Some people are keen to eand the enourmous amount of money but some people are glad to make money that may cover expenditures for comfortable living.
Those people who want to earn large amount of money I divided into two types of people. These are ambigious people and people who like luxe life. First type are people who is differen from others, for them money is recources with the aid of that they can realize theirs projects and aims. It is the people who think that it is important to earn big money. These people primarly business men, who make money to be famous or to compite with his or her rivals.
On the other hand, second type of people are those who likes enjoy luxe life. That is why they earn money to live how they want, where they want. These people want to earn money as much as possible. They think that as more money as more happy would be in theirs life. Moreover, those people suggest that they can buy everything with money.
However another types of group, satisfied to earn to live in comfortable. I think that these people’s view of point on life better than previous one. They are ,usually get more happy from life, see less stress, and live in bettter conditions. For them it is important earn exactly those money which is ready to cover human’s neccessary demands such as food, accomodation, living costs.
Some people do not understant that the process of earning money bring satisfy to person not its presense. And those people who have everything do not get pleasure form minor things, but those who earn and save money to buy a new model car which was produced 2 years ago would be happier.
But highlighted both points of view I will attempt to earn much money. My purpose of my life it is to build a private hospital, and to name this hospital with the name of my mother, that is why I must earn an anormous amount of money to realize it.