TOEFL® essay sample: Poorness and richness which one do you prefer?

[Rofa]

HI
I am new, and i wish to share with you my first essay.if any one can grade it i will be happy to hear from him
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THE POORNESS,THE RICHNESS

If any body asked you, Would you like to be rich? I guarantee that every one certainly is going to wish for being rich, which is the most prominent answer that I am going to have. So we all are on the same page , every one wants to have the easy life, enjoy the living with a plenty of money, possessing the luxury, being worry for nothing .And this is going to be the same thing for both poor and rich people.

For poor guys they believe that their main problems hide behind their lacking of money .And they will be happier if they had it. No one can blame them for that concept, all people share them the same idea .they might be right for a simple reason which is, every dilemma they had faced in their life were going to be solved by the dear lovely money .But for me I can say that they do not have the other problems of owning the money, which is the thing that rich people have it.

On the other side , maybe a little far , you will find the rich ones where the problems of having money; but you should have here a lot of it., for instance they may face the burden of keeping their pocket warm, and that of course by holding the money in their possession. Believe me that is going to be a very had mission than earning it. Also they will complain of the high amounts of taxes they are actually paying, therefore they may convince you by their major tragedy of being chased by the taxes collectors. They also may tell you how they suffer to keep on their prestige, by spending a lot of money on their appearance as they are under the spot.


In conclusion, every man on the earth is complaining; that is something you cannot ban even if you give every one what he wants. That is the instinct of the man to be in need for ever . May be that the thing that makes him go on in his long life trip. If you asked the poor one which the most thing makes him happy he will tell you '' just give me money''. But you cannot take that for granted because that means all rich people are the happiest one on the earth, which is not as they are going to tell.

[Gregduane]

Please tell us the topic of the essay.

When you are writing a TOEFL essay, you must determine what is your point of view. for example, do you agree or disagree with the statement? If you agree with the statement, you must give three reasons why you agree with the statement. If you prefer one point of view, please also give three reasons why you prefer the point of view. If you are asked to compare the advantages of two choices, you must tell three advantages for each choice.

[Rofa]

hello
first I want to thank you for the replay.My topic was about being poor against being rich and what is the characteristics of the two cases.and the point of view of them. first i stated that me and you and every one agree with being rich is better than being poor and this is my opinion.in the following paragraphs i stated the problems of every team
and finally i gave my conclusion that being rich does not make you happy as every body thinks.
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