| #2 (permalink) Sun Mar 08, 2009 21:31 pm TOEFL essay sample: Personal development
I'm writing some essays. This is my first one with the topic "Personal development". I think in my composition I might make many mistakes that I don't appreciate. So I hope I'll receive the help of all of you. Please correct my mistakes if you find any. Thank you!
Have you ever thought about personal development? Have you ever thought about what the personal development is, and what we must do to improve ourselves? These are not easy questions to answer.
At first, we’ll find out the answers to the first question: What is personal development?
Reminisce about our tender ages. When we were children, our parents taught us how to do everything by ourselves; for example, how to feed ourselves, how to do personal hygiene, how to express our love to everybody and how to stand up when we tripped and fell down.
It’s the first lesson in personal development. Therefore, we can comprehend the concept of personal development. It’s the act of developing the knowledge and realizing ourselves, developing talent and potential.
All of the specific fields of personal development aim at the improvement of our heart, emotion and mind.
Another question is , do we need personal development?
I believe all of us will answer “Yes” when we hear this question.
I can say that life always changes, and life won’t be comfortable if you don’t do anything about it.
Do you feel life creates you or otherwise? Have you ever felt empty in your life? Have you ever tried to change your life but nothing has happended? If yes, that means you need personal development and it’s time for you to improve yourself.
The second, what must we do to improve ourselves?
We may all know the famous saying of Rene Descartes, a French philosopher, methematician, scientist in 17th century: " Thinking means existing."
All you need to do is that in realizing yourself, changing yourself and continuing to move.
All you need is to be thinking. Thinking means the maneuver of your thoughts and visibility.
Thinking helps us to exist, be admitted and recognized. If we don't innovate ourselves, we won't catch up with life's change and as a result, we will be rejected.
There is a story about Realizing myself I want to tell you.
There is a saying on the wall in the temple that worship the Apollon deity.
It says, " Realize myself." It means human needs to think "What am I? What must I be? What can I be?"
And Socrates, a Hellenic philosopher, carried a lit lantern by the handle, walking everywhere among the crowd in the daytime.
People ask him: "What do you find?"
He answers " Find human"
Everybody is surprised as to how he found a human with a lightened lantern in the daytime.
It means that If you don't realize yourself, you'll be the same as the person that Socrates had to carry the lightened lantern to find in the daytime.
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| #3 (permalink) Mon Mar 09, 2009 0:57 am TOEFL essay sample: Personal development
Thank you very much for correcting my mistakes. I hope I won't reiterate these mistakes anymore.
Many thanks again
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