Can anybody review my essays that I have written it to enhance my ability...

[Huda2]

hi,
can anybody review my essays that I have written it to enhance my ability to writing?
a lot of thanks

[Tilt]

I will do it with pleasure. But should be noticed I'm not a teacher ))
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[Huda2]

thank you, please, give me your email to send it

[Tilt]

Why don't you post it here?
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[Huda2]

I was preferring to send it for your email because I have several samples.
The planning for future

It is necessary for any person to plan for his future .For me , I'm looking forward to pursue PhD in computer science in one of universities in the world . To achieve this target , have to be available two conditions .First, I should be get a high score in toefl test . Second, getting an acceptance letter from an university.
Regarding toefl test, I'm preparing now to study hard .I'm trying to enhance my abilities in the writing , reading , grammar and listening by online lessons. although I haven't enough of time but I'm very interested with these lessons.
Im working very hard to be ready for toefl test on March. Now, I'm feeling there is tangible progress in my language.
But the feeling of fright from toefl test is very normal matter because this is the first trying and may be the last chance for me.
for the second condition ,I have prepared for study for two years , so , I have got an acceptance from some universities in the world. One is from university of Rostock in north of Germany and another from UNE in Australia and the other from university of calcutta in India.
I should passing the toefl test in the next two months otherwise the letters of acceptance are losing their validity. To get a new acceptance , I has to submit again as any new student.
The planning is important in our life by which we can arrange all things which relate our future and we can progress step by step according to what planned .In the good planning for our life, it should be there alternatives in case of failure in carrying out our planning. In other word , we should be ready for the worst probabilities.

[Tilt]

It is necessary for any person to plan for his future .For me , I'm looking forward to pursue - achieve PhD in computer science in one of universities in the world . To achieve this target - goal , have to be available two conditions - I can't understand .Firstly, I should be get a high score in toefl test . Secondly, getting an acceptance letter from an university.
Regarding toefl test, I'm preparing now to study hard ??? How are you enhancing your knowledge If you are only preparing to study at the moment?.I'm trying to enhance my abilities skills in the writing , reading , grammar and listening by online lessons. although I haven't enough of time but I'm very interested with these lessons.- Is it fits to esseys's object?
Im working very hard to be ready for toefl test on March. Now, I'm feeling there is tangible progress in my language. -what is yout language?
But the feeling of fright from toefl test is very normal matter because this is the first trying - attempt and may be the last chance for me. -I can not see a logical way at all
for the second condition ,I have prepared for study for two years- What is the meaning of sentence? , so , I have got an acceptance from some universities in the world. One is from university of Rostock in north of Germany and another from UNE in Australia and the other from university of calcutta in India. one, and,and the other...
I should passing the toefl test in the next two months otherwise the letters of acceptance are losing their validity. To get a new acceptance , I has to submit again as any new student.
The planning is important in our life [b]by which - it is life or planning? we can arrange all things which relate our future - what is your idea?and we can progress step by step according to what planned- the plan .In the good planning for our life, it should be there alternatives in case of failure in carrying out our planning. In other words , we should be ready for the worst probabilities.

There is only my view.
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[Tilt]

I think another users, especially our coaches, can produce in-depth analysis
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[Huda2]

thank you ,
i would like to know ,what about these words in bold?
are there syntax error or meaning error?

[Kitosdad]

Huda2, I hope this is of use to you.

It is essential for any person to plan his future . For me, I'm looking forward to pursuing a PhD in computer science in one of the Universities in the World .

To achieve this target , I have set myself two conditions .
First, I have to get a high score in toefl test .
Second, I must get an acceptance letter from a university.

Regarding the toefl test: I'm preparing and studying hard . I'm trying to enhance my abilities in writing , reading , grammar and listening by online lessons. I don't really have enough time, but I'm very interested in these lessons.

I'm working very hard to be ready for the toefl test in March. I'm now beginning to feel that there is tangible progress in my language study.

But the feeling of uncertainty from the toefl test is to be expected because this is my first attempt, but it may also be the last chance for me.

For the second condition : I have commited myself to hard study for two years . I have an acceptance from some universities in the world.

One is from University of Rostock in North of Germany and another from UNE in Australia and the other from the University of Calcutta in India.

I am hoping to pass the toefl test in the next two months, otherwise the letters of acceptance which I have will lose their validity. To get a new acceptance , I will have to submit again, the same as any new student.

The planning is important in our lives, by which we can arrange all things which relate
to our futures, and we can progress step by step according to what we have planned.

In planning our futures there should be alternatives in case of failure in carrying out our plans. In other words, we should always be prepared for the worst .
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[Tilt]

One is from University of Rostock in North of Germany and another from UNE in Australia and the other from the University of Calcutta in India. =>

There are some of them - the University of Rostock in North Germany, UNE in Australia and the University of Calcutta located in India.
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[Huda2]

many thanks,
but why are you using to pursuing but not for pursuing?
I'm always confusing between to and for.
can I send another essay?

[Kitosdad]

Because you are LOOKING FORWARD .... to ...... pursuing.

Yes, please do send another.

Going to bed now, but I will edit it in the morning, if no-one else hasn't already done so.
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[Maritialana]

+1

[Huda2]

[Kitosdad]

Discuss the role of leadership and membership in a group .
Explain your discussion with examples.

I agree, being a leader is not easy for any person . There are heavy responsibilities assigned to any group leader.

However, in my opinion , he should have the characteristics of leadership , such as being able to take responsibility for decisions that he has made .Therefore he should make sound decisions .

His suggestions and opinions must be taken carefully, and he should not make decisions alone . He should consult the others and discuss his ideas with them.

I think that for a group member the responsibilities may be less of a burden than those of a leader . He may have an inactive role as a member or he may be consulted in the taking of a decision.

There are some persons in our history who were great leaders. One of these personalities, who I have come to admire so much, is Omer Almuktar, who was a Libyan leader.

He defended his country against the Italian occupation . Personally I'm amazed at his bravery and tenacity, particularly when considering that at that time he was an old man.

He and his men were not as strong as his enemy in terms of weapons and strategy

I believe Omer Almukhtar was the possessor of great personal magnetism, which made him a successful leader, and that is why his men believed in him, and gave their lives for what he & they believed in .
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