TOEFL® essay: Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in...

[Gurramrashmi]

[b]Do you agree or disagree with the following statement.

Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship.

Give suitable examples and reasons to support your answer.

I agree with the following statement that is always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship. According to my nature honesty is the most important part in any relation. I would like to say not only honesty there are many things which are also important as well like love, sacrifices, adjustment etc. But honesty is the most important. There are many examples. These are giving below.

Firstly, I would like to say on the earth at each and every step of life, we face many people and make different types of relationship. For instance, in professional life if we want to make relationship with other people we will have to leave a good impression. This impression will come when we honest towards our work and people. If tell a lie first everyone believe on us but as they come to know they will never trust us and do not like to talk to us.

Secondly, in my opinion telling truth is also important at home. If parents are honest towards their children then automatically kids tell truth. Parents are the model for the kids. If children are in the habit of honesty then at school they never hide the truth. In this way they will get good friends and love of their teachers. If we have love in the family even then any time we will tell a lie it hurts family members. So next time they do not believe on you. In married life honesty is most important key to get success. If husband and wife have love, they adjust for each others and sacrifices at many stapes of life but they are not honest. When they come to know for this hurts them. Once you hurt your life partner then it is very difficult to believe next time.

Finally, I would like to say honesty is the most important part of any relation. For maintain a relation first we have to be honest for that.

Please review my essay. This is my first essay. Tell me what is my level.

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[Gregduane]

You will get 2.5-3 for your essay. Too many grammar and usage mistakes.

[Gurramrashmi]

Thanks Gregduane
Please could you let me know where I did the mistakes.
Rashmi

[Gregduane]

I just tried to correct the grammatical mistakes by rewriting your essay. I deleted some sentences from your original essay either because I could not understand what you were talking about in those sentences or because those sentences are repetitive or illogical.

I have to say honestly that in order to get a passing score for your TOEFL essay, you have to work very hard to improve your English because your English proficiency is far below the one required to complete a university eudation in any English-speaking country. In other words, even if you are admitted by a university in an English-speaking Country, you will fail your English composition courses if you are an undergraduate student, or you will fail your research papers if you are a graduate student. Your teachers will recommend you to drop off from the courses of your field of study and to take some ESL writing courses instead.

The following is my rewriting of your essay:

I agree with the following statement that always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship. Although there are many things which are important to us such as love, sacrifices, adjustment etc, in my opinion, honesty is the most important thing. There are many examples to justify my opinion, which will be given below.

Firstly, I would like to say on the earth at every step of life, we face many people and make different types of relationship. For instance, in professional life if we want to make relationship with other people we will have to leave a good impression. This impression will come when we become honest towards our work and people. If you tell a lie, at first people may believe us; but if they get to know the truth finally, they will never trust us and will never like to talk to us.

Secondly, in my opinion telling truth is also important at home. If parents are honest towards their children, then automatically kids will tell truth. Parents are the model for the kids. If children are in the habit of being honest, then at school they will never hide the truth. In this way they will make good friends and their teachers will love them. But even If we have love in the family, we should also be honesty. Even lying to family members will hurt them, and the consequence is that next time they will not believe you. In married life, honesty is the most important key to success.
Finally, honesty is the most important part in any relationship. To maintain a close relation, first we have to be honest.