TOEFL® essay: Parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions...

[Ashishb31]

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TOPIC: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions for their older (15 to 18 year-old) teenage children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

As we grow in our life we learn many things, from teachers, parents or some other experienced person. We face many failures and achievements both give us some bad and good experiences. By facing all ups and down of life we become mature enough to take better decisions. Same is with our parents or other adult who are older than us they have gained ample of knowledge from their experiences. I think parents or other older relatives can make important decisions for their teenage children. Parents have seen this world more than teenagers; they can understand better that what is right or what is wrong for them.

In this 21st century teenagers want to lead their own life, they like less interruption from others in their decisions. This sometimes creates problem for them for example when my younger brother wanted to learn riding bike. I and my father told him that you are not mature enough to ride bike wait for one more year. He refused our decision and started learning bike as he was not able to balance bike at that age he fall down and got fracture in his leg. We face many such situations when teenagers like to follow their own decisions. As they are not mature enough, their decisions are influenced on their inner feelings. I think our parents are best advisors they can help us in making major decisions like in choosing our carrier. Parents or other adult relatives inculcate sense in teenagers to make proper decision. Nothing can teach better than experience which our parents and other adult relatives have.

So finally I can say that it is true that adults are more mature than teenagers. They have sense of advising enhanced solution for any problem. They should make decisions for wellbeing of new generation. So that new generation can blossomed like nursery guarded by best gardner.

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