when you know me. the first text

[Jamilion]

Thank you noble people for your kind invitation
And I hope you would accept me as a participant in your useful forum

This is my first text in English I will be grateful if you correct the incorrect grammar or expressions

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When you know me..
when I be a part of your life..
Day by day
you will find out
you have no excuse to be disappointed or desperate .
you will find out the world is wider than your sadness,
stronger than your fears,
and more beautiful than your current life.
You will find out the life have more colors than the white and black.
And you will fall in love as never before.
My mission is not to make you discover another colors around you,
but to make you discover the colors inside your soul .
to discover the code of happiness in your heart..
you have the face which gets my attention ,
and all what you need
to explode the energy of love inside me
just to get my attention.

Your sweet gaze is the spark of warm fire
And I'm sure that what you need.

I need you to love.
And you need me to be happy .
the world Is a lover man like me.
You could love someone whom younger or more handsome …
and you may have fun with him..
You may spend trips,
And watch movies..
and share him the same bed.
But the question will remain:
why there is still an emptiness in your soul
and a fear in your heart,
and your current life is not the life you want..

when you feel that ..
don't pour more drink into your glass..
the matter is that your young partner could not think like me ..
could not hug like me..
could not be a talented lover like me..

Jamil.
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We are always looking for a miracle but the things we are used to seeing are more miraculous than those we are looking for.

[Janelt]

When you understand me..
when I am a part of your life..
Day by day
you will find out
you have no excuse to be disappointed or desperate .
you will find out the world is wider than your sadness,
stronger than your fears,
and more beautiful than your current life.
You will find out the life has more colors than the white and black.
And you will fall in love like never did before.

My mission is not to make you discover colors around you,
but to make you discover the colors inside your soul .
to discover the code of happiness in your heart..
you have the face which attracts my attention ,
and that is all you need
to explode the energy of love inside me
just to attract my attention.

Your sweet gaze is the spark of warm fire
And I'm sure that's what I need.

I need you to love.
And you need me to be happy .
the world Is a lover man like me.
You could love someone younger or more handsome …
and you may have fun with him..
You may be on trips,
And watch movies..
and to be with him on the same bed.
But the question will remain:
why there is still an emptiness in your soul
and a fear in your heart,
and your current life is not the life you want..

when you realize that ..
don't pour more drink into your glass..
the matter is that your young partner could not think like me ..
could not hug like me..
could not be a talented lover like me..

Just my suggestion :P, Jamil. Btw, I don't really understand 2 sentences
And you need me to be happy .
the world Is a lover man like me.
Your text is moving, keep moving on! ;)
Nice day!

[Jamilion]

nice to be here Janelt

In sentence 1
I wanted to say
I'm the source of happiness to you

As to sentence 2

I meant

The world may be reduced in a man who loves you.

your suggestions are in the center of my attention. thank you for your time..

when i be willing to fly on some cloud, i find myself writing such words..

I feel life become softer. and there are another worlds smile to me , and call me to follow them.. I wasn't butterfly someday.. but man likes flowers too.
If you like to fly with me, the cloud has a place for more than one. :wink:

thank you again

Jamil
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We are always looking for a miracle but the things we are used to seeing are more miraculous than those we are looking for.