Your way to improve your skill to construct a strong sentence in future!

[Jamilion]

Let's people try to write a story in no more than two lines . Of course
This requires a special ability , I hope you do have it

Jamilion
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We are always looking for a miracle but the things we are used to seeing are more miraculous than those we are looking for.

[Kitosdad]

My old Grandmother used to say, " If you think you can, then you're right.

She also said, " If you think you can't, you're right too. You decide which describes YOU.
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[Jamilion]

Mr. Kitosdad thank for your quick answer. And I hope you will find the time to correct us.

Lat me say the following short story:

When she was 19, she was my dream which I was seeking to make it come true. And because she had the same desire we had smashed all the obstacles in our way. then I found out : life always biases toward love's side.

Jamilion
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We are always looking for a miracle but the things we are used to seeing are more miraculous than those we are looking for.

[Sahid59]

..

Story in just two lines..?

Two little kittens...two little kisses..
Two days later....Mr and Mrs...

..
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Sahid59

Better tomorrow with better English

[Kitosdad]

When she was 19, she was my dream which I was seeking to make it come true. And because she had the same desire we had smashed all the obstacles in our way. then I found out : life always biases toward love's side.

When she was 19, she was what I had dreamed of all of my life, a dream that I prayed would one day come true.

Little did I know that she felt the same way about me too, as together we discovered that LOVE will always find a way to bring soul-mates together.
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[Jamilion]

Thank you Mir. Kitosdad... but I would like to know what is the wrong in what I had written . Is it correct grammatically or not.. can I let the text as it was , and will be correct in this case?

Or I must turn it into your text that you suggest...

I'm just trying to exploit your existence to learn from you as much as I can ...

Good bye teacher .

Jamilion
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We are always looking for a miracle but the things we are used to seeing are more miraculous than those we are looking for.

[Jamilion]

thank you Sahid for your answer and for your genius story.

Have a nice day
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We are always looking for a miracle but the things we are used to seeing are more miraculous than those we are looking for.

[Kitosdad]

Jamilion, I am sorry. I had no intention of disturbing your text. It is understandable as written, but only by someone who has a good understanding of English, and of the story.

My intention was to merely make it more understandable to a wider audience.

No offence meant.

Kitosdad.
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[Jamilion]

I consider that a praising Mr. Kitosdad. (smile)
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We are always looking for a miracle but the things we are used to seeing are more miraculous than those we are looking for.

[Sahid59]

[Kitosdad]

Good morning Sahid, I'm sure that he does, and perhaps it was me who was being over-sensitive to his post. Language has a way of mixing our meanings up sometimes.

Regards to you both.

Kitosdad.
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[Jamilion]

I only asked our teacher Mr.Kitosdad a question about my text if it is acceptable , if it is not that means I have to review myself again . so my intention was the learning only , but perhaps my way in expression was not so clear that Mr. Kitosdad thought I'm feeling bad because he has rewritten my text . . no at all.
I want him change what I write again and again .. because this enters in my information balance.

Mr.Kitosdad we will follow you until the other edge of English.

Thanks for your efforts and interaction.

Jam...
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We are always looking for a miracle but the things we are used to seeing are more miraculous than those we are looking for.

[Kitosdad]

Jam, I look forward to your posts, and I will gladly help wherever I can.

Your friend,

Kitosdad.
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[Jamilion]

Thank you. and I'm also looking forward to your new word today.

Jam.
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We are always looking for a miracle but the things we are used to seeing are more miraculous than those we are looking for.

[Kitosdad]

Jam, which word would you like ?.

I leave the choice up to you. I await with interest.

Kitosdad.
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