TOEFL® essay: Food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved...

[Kim Huen Suk]

It is important to eat and prepare some food for human life.
That is why there are many recipes for food from French cuisines to Hamburgers around a world.

Recently, there are many kinds of food which can be bought and prepared easily. It is the truth that easy food and brand new cookers improve our life. There are three specific reasons here.

First, It takes time to make food at least thirty minutes. In the morning, you wake up and eat something to be energetic at work, but you also should be on time at work. If you have some easy food like instant food, fast food and cereal, it would take short time to prepare and have food enough to start morning. We can invest time on our work with easy food.

Second, working women have been increasing in modern time, who traditionally had worked in a house doing house chores and taking care of babies. Preparing food has to be three times per one day. Do you imagine what is like to prepare food every day for woman working and taking care of children at the same time. Fortunately, mega companies producing food supplies have been invented easy food and food supplies so that many moms can do their best at work.

Thirds, we always enjoy many kinds of food from restaurant course food to cookies. It is true that it helps our children’s growth. Child needs to have high calories and vitamin for their development.
It is obious that mom made food is the best to children in the side of ingredient level, but now that they can eat some food, whenever they want due to presence of food that is prepared easily like cereal, pizza and frozen food. Those foods are not needed to use fire and knife which can be harm to young children.

Food is one of the ways to express a culture in a country, so dedicated food taste good and look good. French food which takes a lot of time to enjoy and take many food supplies is one of our entertainment, but processed food for convenience also makes fast, happy and healthy.

[Kitosdad]

Kim Huen Suk, your spelling is excellent, and your subject is a good one to choose.

I'm sure that you put a lot of thought in to it, but maybe only as you were typing it.

May I suggest that you begin by writing your draft out on paper first, and then read it through a few times.

Group together the points that you want to stress, and let the rest blend in naturally.
Your essay is fine, but your points are random and unconnected. Otherwise, it is a fine effort.

Kitosdad.
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[Kim Huen Suk]

Actually, I am a very new at Tofel essay, and writing some English essaies is not easy task for me yet.
I am going to try to read mine and other's good writing.
Thanks for your nice advices.

[Kitosdad]

Thanks for your reply Kim. I suggest you read the articles written by Alan on the home page. No need to spend time and money buying books.

Everything you need, you can find here, and all for FREE. How good is that !

Kitosdad.
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