TOEFL® essay: Honesty, loyalty and understanding are the three significant...

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This is my friend paragraph:

Honesty, loyalty and understanding are the three significant characteristics I seek in a good friend. There are several reasons why I go for those expectations. Firstly, my good friend needs to be an honest person in everything she or he does. In addition, with the deep faith in my friendship, the honest would tell me who else is true and realistic through her or his words and actions. For example, I expect that an honest friend always. Tells truth and acts in real meanings as well as with real feeling. This is how I can trust her or him. Secondly, loyalty is my expectation in a good friend, since I believe that a good friend is willing to be beside me in a happy time and also in a bad time. Consequently, that could who really does care for what are happening to my life. Finally, I love to have an understanding friend in order to be a good friend. This characteristic is very important because it reveals to me all the sympathy toward and my situations. For instance, a good friend would understand my feelings and my emotions. That is how we can get along well thought time. All in all, honesty, loyalty and understanding are my three significant characteristics I seek in a good friend. I think a good quality when I have a good friend.

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This is my friends paragraph:

Honesty, loyalty and understanding are the three significant characteristics I seek in a good friend. There are several reasons why I go for those.

Firstly, my good friend needs to be an honest person in everything she or he does.
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In addition, with the deep faith in my friendship, the honest would tell me who else is true and realistic through her or his words and actions. ( This makes no sense.)
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For example, I expect that a friend should always be honest with me.
Always telling the truth and acting with real feeling. This is how I know can trust her or him.

Secondly, loyalty is my expectation in a good friend, since I believe that a good friend is willing to be beside me in a happy times, and also in a bad times.

Consequently, that could who really does care for what are happening to my life.???????
( Rubbish. )

Finally, I need to have an understanding friend in order for them to be considered a good friend. This characteristic is very important because it reveals to me all the sympathy toward me and my problems.

For instance, a good friend would understand my feelings and my emotions. That is how we can get along well through difficult times.

All in all, honesty, loyalty and understanding are the three significant characteristics I seek in a good friend.

ps. You can't say " finally ", and then continue to say, " for instance ".
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[Bakhtyar_Zahid]

Honesty is telling the truth about something and never lying about anything that’s major or stuff like that. Minor thing are ok but major things are not. Lying can make someone lose trust on you and it can get you nowhere in life. Honesty can only be finding on a good man. Being honest gains you respect from people and you can be very successful in life. If you like about something small like less often it doesn’t mean you’re not honest. If you keep lying and you never tell the truth it tells that you can’t be trustable and reliable. You need honesty to gain respect. If your honest that means you have a clean heart. You can be a good man if you’re honest. Not that many people in the world are honest because they lie a lot. You can find many lies in stuff like the internet and media perhaps 2012 that’s the stupidest thing I heard. That means the people are trying to scare you to get attention and stuff like that. Once 2012 goes by watch how people won’t trust the media or government and etc because the lost respect which means they’re not honest. Being honest is being someone good no bad. If you tell the truth most the times you might get lots of respect from people. People who get jealous are people who aren’t people who respect that don’t mean they’re not honest. They can be maybe there not respecting you or something. Be honest makes you gain huge respect. Honest people can be dumb and nice. Being honest can be showing on your face. Some people aren’t honest because they were dared by friends to do it and they got use to it or something like that. If you’re strong hearted that means you’re honest and trustable. But sometimes don’t get to trustable because maybe they act like it to rob you or something. Don’t get to personal if you know someone you trust. The only people you can trust is your parent’s brother sister’s cousins and family members and stuff like that. Earning respect comes from honesty be smart and do the right thing. Don’t be stupid and do the dumb thing. Play the game and get the respect. If you see a bully and you think he gets respect don’t think so because imagine how much haters would not respect a bully. Probably more then he’s friends. If you be honest probably nobody would pick on you like one of my friends he’s soo honest that people wouldn’t even take his stuff they wouldn’t even touch him to tell the truth.