TOEFL® essay: The Internet is the most important invention ever

[Bitsy Bernice]

Many people say that the Internet is the most important invention ever. Do you agree or disagree with this and if not, what do you believe to be more important? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Internet has so far been the greatest inention in the history of mankind. 10 years ago no one knew about the internet whereas these days every home has access to it. Internet was mainly introduced for communication but there's more to it than e-mails, web sites and rooms.

I think internet is the most important invention of all times because it enables youto chat with another person from various parts of this planet. It brings th whole world under one roof.
Apart from being highly advanced in terms of communication, it's a place for business transactions, services like online banking, job seeking, purchasing of airline tickets, shopping and also a very good source of entertainment. It's also a fountain of information, everything you need to know can be found through search engines like google and yahoo saving you time from going through encyclopedias and libraries.

With all these benefits, you can still have many unfavoarble aspects on the internet such as other people getting access to your personal informations, viruses, spamming and pornography when it comes to children getting access to internet.

However in my opinion since the advantages of this invention goes beyond its disadvantages I really think internet is the best invention ever.

CORRECTIONS NEEDED PLEASE.

[Kitosdad]

Bernice, a great improvement to the dross you were turning out a few months ago.

Obviously you have learnt a lot in this time. Still a way to go, but you can pat yourself on the back for such an improvement.

You have, at last, seen how conforming to the rules of basic grammar and sentence structure can improve your visual presentation no end.

A little more emphasis on the disadvantages, instead of a brief list, would have improved this essay even further. If you can put it over vocal-wise, then you should fly through.

It does need a few corrections, but I'll leave that for someone else to do.

Well done. Just don't rest on your laurels. Keep up the good basics, and think even harder before launching into print. You're getting there B.

Kitosdad.
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[Bitsy Bernice]

thank you.