TOEFL® essay: The Different Between Two Best Friends

[Shradaq]

Dear Alan,
I wrote about the dufferent about two people in the story that i have read. Could you please help me correct my paragraph? I not sure abuot the verb that i have uesd. I am really appreciated for your help, and I'm watting for your respond.

The Different Between Two Best Friends
Although Isaac and Jake grew-up in the same place and were best friend, they have had different way about farming, the new ideas and different personality. First, they had different about farming. Isaac liked to work on a small farm, but Jake liked to have big farm and growing. Isaac was routine-mind about the style of the farm. On the order hand, Jake was very innovating. Second different is about the new ideas. Isaac not very interested in what outside had say. In contrast, Jake very interested in new information about farming. For example, Jake was welling to grown thirty acres of cucumbers and hired more people to pick cucumbers. However, Isaac was working only ten acres of cucumbers and picked cucumbers by himself. In addition, Jake also follows the ideas about how much fertilizer he should be using and some more of thing form the H.H Harlow Company, whereas Isaac not interest about that at all. The third different between Isaac and Jake is about personality. Isaac was a shy and deliberate person, while Jake was out going, move fast and open change. For instance, Isaac didn’t like to have a big celebrate on his birthday. Unlike Isaac, Jake was out going with the community activity such as he was the president of school board. To sum up, Isaac and Jake were very different, although they were best friend.

[Kitosdad]

Good morning Shradaq , you have been very brave to attempt this exercise with your
limited vocabulary, and you have done pretty well, all things being considered.

Should Alan not respond to your request by mid-day, then I will try and give you some help.

Kitosdad.
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[Kitosdad]

The Difference Between Two Best Friends .

Isaac and Jake grew-up in the same place, and although having very different personalities, they were the very best of friends.

They were both farmers, but both had different ideas as to how their farms should be ran.

Isaac liked to work on a small farm, and preferred the traditional methods of farming, whilst Jake liked to manage a big farm and to grow large amounts of produce ,using the very latest techniques

Isaac was routine-minded about the manner of running his farm. On the other hand, Jake was very innovative. Isaac was not very interested in what others had say. In contrast, Jake was very interested in all of the latest information about farming.

Jake was willing to grow thirty acres of cucumbers, and even hired more people to pick them. However, Isaac was working only ten acres of cucumbers and picked the cucumbers by himself.

In addition, Jake also followed the ideas about how much fertilizer he should be using, and other recommendations from the local fertilizer producers, whereas Isaac showed no interest about that at all.

Isaac and Jake had very different personalities. Isaac was a shy and deliberate person, whilst Jake was out-going, fast-moving and ever-open to new innovations.

Isaac didn’t like to have a big celebration on his birthday, unlike Jake, who did like to celebrate his birthdays.

Jake liked to be involved in community activities. He was the President of school board, but Isaac preferred to remain out of such activities.

To sum up, Isaac and Jake were very different, although they were the best of friends.
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