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#2 (permalink) Sat May 23, 2009 21:05 pm My writings: She hid her pain under her smile... |
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Hello everyone,
I would love to know what everyone thinks.
Thanks, Basma. |
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Basmamostafa You can meet me at english-test.net
Joined: 11 May 2009 Posts: 62 Location: Egypt
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#3 (permalink) Sun May 24, 2009 3:41 am My writings: She hid her pain under her smile... |
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Hello Basma,
Wanna know what I think?? It's, you're a great young writer, if you ask me! :D _________________ If you want to change the world, be one of the change. |
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Rosalisa I'm here quite often ;-)
Joined: 02 Aug 2006 Posts: 314 Location: Cambodia
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#4 (permalink) Sun May 24, 2009 6:52 am My writings: She hid her pain under her smile... |
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Very nice.
How did you get the job? What's your audience? |
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ForOneSucks I'm new here and I like it ;-)
Joined: 18 Apr 2009 Posts: 36
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#5 (permalink) Sun May 24, 2009 7:22 am My writings: She hid her pain under her smile... |
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Hey,
Thanks a lot. I' glad you liked them. :) :) Foronesucks, It's not technically a job, I am only an intern. The audience includes teens.
Thanks, Basma. |
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Basmamostafa You can meet me at english-test.net
Joined: 11 May 2009 Posts: 62 Location: Egypt
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#6 (permalink) Sun May 24, 2009 12:16 pm My writings: She hid her pain under her smile... |
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Hi Basma
Some great potential here, be careful with just placing your poetry on the net as images can be easily copied, even within a closed membership forum.
I think for your target audience this poetry has a very high appeal. The repetition of the opening words to the sentences is a long tradition that goes way back. And one I used for one of my published poems back in the day , when my youth was a reality and not just in my heart.
The phrase to "give your feelings" connects with giving of oneself, giving sth away and was the msg I got from the poem.
Rock on, and donīt let anyone stop you in expressing what you want to reveal or think is important to anyone, even if just for your own self development. _________________ Please meet Stewart Tunncilff |
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Stew.t. I'm here quite often ;-)

Joined: 14 Dec 2006 Posts: 561 Location: Leipzig, Germany
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