Proofread this TOEFL® essay: Advantages and disadvantages of internet.

[Pyuk]

Advantages and disadvantages of internet

The internet is considerate one of the more important means of communications and more used too. Although the telephone is considerate more quick. The internet is used in the job and in the school and in the university and in the house too.

An additional advantage of internet is you can send email, chatting with your friends, and family and people of the job and you can meet people the other places too. Furthermore, you can meet much information; you can know new notices of the world, search work, and download music and videos.

However, you can meet badly people; the children are exposed to come into being as inappropriate pages, for example, pages containing pornography. You can become addicted to internet and you can download viruses to your computer, and it is expensive.

Finally, the internet has you advantages and disadvantages; only, people must learn to correctly uses, taking advantage of the benefits that has.

TOEFL listening discussions: What will the student try to do with his next essay?

[Rfaleet]

The internet is considered one of the most important means of communications and it is widespread all over the world . Although the telephone is considered more quick,the internet is used in job, school, university,and house .

Moreover, internet help you to send emails , chatt with your friends, family and people from many parts of the world. Furthermore, you can get alot of information; you can know new notices of the world, search work, and download music and videos.

On the other hand, you may meet bad people; the children are exposed to watch inappropriate pages, for example, pages containing pornography. You may become addicted to internet and you may download viruses to your computer which damge it .

Finally, the internet has many of advantages and disadvantages; people should use it to benifit from it .

or you can end with the internet is a weapon with two edges
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[Rfaleet]

From the beginning of creation till now ,whatever knowledge man gets , it is considered
little in compare with the knowledge of this world . Science never runs out and so human
inventiveness . Man invented things to extend the power of his muscles but today man
invents to extend the power of his mind . And this is the new technology that made the
far nearer the mysterious clearer . It is the international network ( abbreviated Internet)
I t is becoming a necessity to have a computer and a connection . You feel as if the world
were a small village and everyone can communicate with each other . A man from
China
is talking to a man in Gaza , a woman from Brazil is sending documents to a woman in
Russia and so on. This is one aspect of the advantages of the internet but there are many
The internet became familiar to many people
more .

,including children all over the world .Some
of them use it almost every day ,either for games or learning or watching films .

The internet is a whole new world if it is used to help humanity make progress in life to
make it easier but it can also be evil if it is used badly or without close control and
supervision ,otherwise it will be destructive weapon .
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[Jamie (K)]

Rfaleet, don't try to proofread people's English essays. Your corrected version is worse than the original.

[Pyuk]

:( So please, help me then... :(

[Kitosdad]

Pyuk, I'm sorry to tell you that you are not at a level to be even considering writing essays, no matter how brief. You certainly had some reasonable ideas, but unfortunately you lack the ability to demonstrate them sufficiently well.

I'd suggest that you spend more time in reading the articles written by Alan on the home page. There you will learn about sentence structure and how to categorise your points.

There will come a time when you will feel confident enough to compose another essay,and this time it will be much better than this attempt.

Kitos.
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Keep it simple ... Keep it interesting.

[Jamie (K)]

Pyuk, remember that we English speakers on the forum are not paid. We just do this on our own time because we enjoy helping people. Most of us don't have enough time to correct something as long as an essay.

There is also the issue that if we corrected people's essays, there would probably be quite a lot of people around the world turning in homework that they didn't truly write.

[Rfaleet]

[Kitosdad]

Rfaleet, I am in no way trying to discourage you, but you seem to be typing as you think.Problem is, that you are not thinking logically, merely uttering thoughts that flash into your mind momentarily.

Try to organise your thoughts and jot them down on a notebook.
Reorganise them in order of importance, then " flesh them out " further.

They write your essay. I'm sure you will see an immediate improvement.

Kitos.
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[Milanya]

Where is the problem? Here.
Or where are my mistakes? And here.
or if u r good - And here!!
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con·text - The part of a text or statement that surrounds a particular word or passage and determines its meaning.

[Rfaleet]

I am not proficient in English

or I said that I am native speaker

but i specialized in the language and iam happy in helping others

not like others critisize withou saying what is the true

if you are good say what is the true without saying this is wrong or this is bad

indicate where are mistakes
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[Jamie (K)]

[Rfaleet]

This is a language and it's full of information and knowledge.

If you are proficient , Write here your essay .

Don't blame others for your own mistakes .

Writing shows your ability .

If you accept the challenge , Lets start.
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[Jamie (K)]

[Rfaleet]

I don't understand what do u mean .

Stop that and explain .
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