TOEFL® essay:Traditional games are more useful than modern games in developing...

[Steven1815]

Traditional games are more useful than modern games in developing children’s abilities. To what extent do you agree?

It is commonly deemed that games play an increasingly pivotal role for children’s growth, which bestows marked benefits upon the future life of our next generation. Yet whether conventional games are more useful than modern ones in youngsters’ physical, mental, intellectual development has sparked spirited debate. From my perspective, the boons brought about by conventional games far outweigh the banes.

It is manifest that conventional games result in numerous benefits. Owing to the fierce competitions at school, children, in their formative years, need entertainment to balance the long sitting at desks. Obviously, conventional games afford a break from the mental focus of academic courses, which enable youngsters to relax their body and ease their mind. Furthermore, conventional games are able to cultivate young adult a sense of teamwork. Winning the game is not everything, cooperation in striving to win is marvelous successful at help people to communicate efficiently, to trust in each other, and to accept those who are different from themselves. These might make them better prepared for their adult life and become better at decision making and critical thinking.

However, conventional games do not come without drawbacks. If everything children play in the game is exactly the same, their world would really be dull and monotonous. As the saying goes,” nothing endures except change.” No matter how wonderful certain traditional game is, the same without any innovation will lose attraction among young people sooner or later. On the other hand, modern computer games are more likely to measure up to various expectations of adolescents, thereby putting a new patch on the previous programs, from which students can learn computer application abilities.

In the final analysis, I concede that although modern games have something unique, traditional ones are more blessings to offspring. On balance, children need to do their utmost to honor modern technology.

TOEFL listening discussions: A conversation in a campus cafeteria

[Kitosdad]

Good morning Steven. Try using "clearly" in place of manifest.

This is a pretty good essay. You've obviously given a lot of time to it's composition, and very little needs to be altered to make it an excellent essay.

Kitos.
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Keep it simple ... Keep it interesting.

[Steven1815]

thanks, Kitosdad! i am glad to your comment!
thanks very much.