TOEFL® essay: Is it suitable to seperate boys and girls at different school.

[Darkangel12891]

In many decades, there are many schools seperating boys and girls because of the nation’s custom and
its believeness. However, I totally deem that they had better give both of them the same studying enviroment for two reasons as following.

Throughout the past, there are many revolutionary events against for woman’s right happened all around the world. Thus,the history has changed. There are no boulder between man and woman. Women, nowadays, have illustrated to work seemly as efficient as men do as the facts show that women are now receiving the same salary as men at the construction site and,in studying area, the girls's study qualification are sometimes better in diversity of subjects. Here is one of my experience about this issue, my school used to belong to girl when our country was suffering from the french's invasion because in that period of time, men is higly expected in social classes but women does not. Their duties was to become a good wife and skillful housewife. After liberation, they allowed boys to get in and thus give me the opportunity to study here.

Secondly, boys or girls can not wholly develop without interacting with each others. They compete together in their class and the large numbers of school’s activities that result in better scores and improved skills because they do not want to be less than their opposite gender. Never the less, through learning in the same school, they can make friendship or even fall in love together, which will create the most beatiful memories in their life.

In conclusion, the period of gender discimination is over. Women’s rights has been indentified. Thus, along mixturing boys and girls in the same school, we are accidentally deleting the distance between them and so make our country grow faster in the future.

[Kitosdad]

DA, I really can't believe that you have taken the time to sit and write this essay in such a slip-shod fashion. It is totally without any foundation, and your grammar is not even worth commenting on.

For goodness sake, write it again. You are capable of far better work than this.

Kitos.
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[Darkangel12891]

thanks a lot, i haven't accustomed to english for a long time for preparing my final test. I will try it again.

[Happytofita]

Hello DarkA,

Read single-sex or co-educational schools. It will give you some ideas.

Good luck.

: o)