TOEFL® essay: Different cultures

[Santiagolds]

I'm living as a foreign exchange student in United States and this essay is about a big difference between American teenagers and south American teenagers.

First of all the big difference between these teenagers is the way they work to get a new car and some other things that a teenager would like to have. Most of the teenagers in United states already have a job when they turn 16, and this is because parents do not give them money to buy their own cars but in south America teenagers are not used to work at that age because either their parents give them everything that they need or they don't like to work.

This could be the reason why Americans get richer than south American people. If everybody started working at the age of 16 , we would have more experience and we would know earlier what is like to work to get your own things, also they would be more mature when they apply for a ''real'' job and they would know how to handle money because they started handling money at a very young age.

I wish that I grew up in this country, and I think that every country should have this kind of culture because the world would be easier for everybody when we get older.

can somebody take a look at this plis?

[Kitosdad]

I've looked. It's short, but it's good.

Kitos.
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