Essay challenge. Anyone fancy composing an essay?

[Kitosdad]

Anyone fancy composing an essay? The topic will be;

School uniforms. An advantage or a disadvantage? No prizes, just an exercise for lazy minds.

Kitos.
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[Nangueve]

Hi there,

School uniforms are an advantage because there will be no challenge of who dresses better, what type of clothes he/she wearing and what so ever, one can feel good of what he or she wore for it is just a uniform. Actual uniform is a good idea specially for those who can not afford to buy nice and expensive clothes.

This is what I think
Julieta

[Sherifatbidemi]

School uniforms: An advantage or disadvantages? Uniform as the name implies, is an adopted piece of clothing materials designed for a particular school or institution. From time immemorial, schools have been associated with usage of uniform. It was even uniform that attracted majority of pupils who had their formal education into school. Some people are of the opinion that school uniform should not be made obligatory because, they want to attain freedom from restriction. A student could choose to wear what He/She wishes to put on. Also, variation in weather cönditions which determines the type of cloth to be worn, is one of the factors. On several occations most pupils had refused to go to school simply because of uniform, which they were tired of putting on. Contrary to the aforementioned points, I am of the opinion that school uniforms should be compelled on all students. This is as a result of the following reasons: Firstly, it is a means of maintaining discipline amongst students. A disciplined individual is a well cultured person, if he finds himself as a uniform person in future, it will be easier for him to oblige. Some notable professions are attributable to uniforn, for example, Military, and Nursing. Secondly, it shows equality amongst the student. This rules out arrogancy and extravagancy in dressing. Uniform also serves as a means of identification. Any student especially the underaged if found could be traced back to the particular school using the uniform. In conclusion, uniform is part of school system and should be advocated to all schöols.

[SkiIucK]

Please point out any mistakes. If you have the time, of course.

Thank you.

School uniforms. An advantage or a disadvantage?


Much has been discussed about school uniforms. And the result has always been the same - nonsensical flipping of arguments on both sides, but neither bends. There's a lesson to be learned here: most people won't alter their minds just because somebody presented more convincing reasons than theirs. Then, in order to determine whether school uniforms are a 'yes' or a 'no', we'd have to objectively examine this multilateral coin. Even then, though, it would be hard to draw a clear and persuasive inference.

Arguments 'for' mainly lie in the economic and social spheres. Let's imagine a student whose parents are not rich enough to secure him with all the things he'd want - first hand textbooks, a cellphone, nice clothes, a lot of pocket money, etc. Bringing in uniforms would be a ray of light for him. He'd no longer be the odd one out, because stratum imbalances would be erased. Also, family income wouldn't be spent on clothing but rather on something else of value.
Furthermore, this student would feel as part of school traditions. And not only him, for he's a representative of an entire social class. Some people adore belonging to something, being recognized with it.

Although removing social differences sounds tempting, there are arguments against uniforms, and they are quite the opposite to the ones above. According to the opponents of school uniforms, students become depersonalized - they are lost in the mass. Learners coming from wealthy families are likely to disdain the notion of uniforms. Embellishing themselves with various secular paraphernalia is what matters the most to many of them. This, of course, is done to avoid the effect of remaining unnoticed, of losing one's individuality.
Another argument against school uniforms is that they lack the comfort of everyday garments.

We also ought to ask ourselves what is the incentive behind introducing school uniforms. What's in it for whom? Schools win money by arranging contracts with tailoring firms. Also, schools strengthen their names once they bring in the uniforms. This is due to their students being identified with the clothes they wear and consequently with the name of the institution.

After having put forth the facts as they are, objectively, I'd like to comment on a thing or two.

The arguments that support the main idea are the ones I agree with, and most people would, too.
However, part of the opposing thesis lacks underlying support. It is rather superficial. First, when you begin identifying yourself with how you look and what your clothes are, you are shallow. A person is a complex of many things, not only some rags. I can adduce a fine example. Uniforms were made compulsory right after I entered high-school. The resistance was huge; crumpled blue shirts and striped ties were clogging the rucksacks. Students despised, and still do, but less, uniforms.
Second, I am inclined to agree that sometimes school attire isn't the most pleasant feeling for one's skin.
The biggest problem notwithstanding is schools. To put it in a nutshell, countries need sheep. And seemingly, uniforms everywhere are brought in under some other pretext. But, alas, that's the first step to producing clueless tools.

Then again, schools cannot impose uniforms simply because they like them. They first have to inquire, if you will, students whether they want this change or not. This perhaps is the most reasonable deduction that could be made - every separate school asking before making any alterations.

[Kitosdad]

Ski. I'm positive that you have made many, many errors, but I'm damned if I can find them. Aghhhhhhh!

Kitos.
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[SkiIucK]

Hello Bill,

I don't think I understand what you wrote there.

[Shyone]

[Kitosdad]

Ski, it was a joke. Your essay was so good I couldn't find ONE mistake, but maybe Alan could.
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[SkiIucK]

[Sherifatbidemi]

Hi, somebody should please look into my essay and comment on it not leaving out necessary corrections. Thank you.

[Kitosdad]

Both of your essays have been edited Sherifatbidemi. Try the other other thread.

Kitos.
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[Sherifatbidemi]

Thank you Kistod, I have been unable to link to corrections despite checking the necessary links

[Sherifatbidemi]

Thank you Kistod, I have been unable to link to corrections despite checking the necessary links

[Alan]

Hi SkiIucK,

As you've made the effort to write the essay, I'll offer some suggestions in capital letters:

Much has been discussed about school uniforms. And the result has always been the same - nonsensical TO AND FRO of arguments on both sides, but neither GIVES WAY. There's a lesson to be learned here: most people won't CHANGE their minds just because somebody HAS presented more convincing reasons than theirs. Then, in order to determine whether school uniforms are a 'yes' or a 'no', WE have to objectively examine this multilateral ARGUMENT. Even then, though, it would be hard to draw a clear and persuasive inference.

Arguments 'for' mainly lie in the economic and social spheres. Let's imagine a student whose parents are not rich enough to PROVIDE him with all the things he'd want - NEW textbooks, a cellphone, nice clothes, a lot of pocket money, etc. Bringing in uniforms would be LIKE a ray of SUNSHINE for him. He'd no longer be the odd one out, because DIFFERENCES IN SOCIAL LEVELS would be erased. Also, family income wouldn't be spent on clothing but rather on something else of value.
Furthermore, this student would feel part of school traditions. And not only him, for he's a representative of an entire social class. Some people adore belonging to something, being recognized BY it.

Although removing social differences sounds tempting, there are arguments against uniforms, and they are quite the opposite to the ones above. According to the opponents of school uniforms, students become depersonalized - they are lost in the mass. Learners coming from wealthy families are likely to DISREGARD the notion of uniforms. Embellishing themselves with various secular paraphernalia is what matters the most to many of them. This, of course, is done to avoid the effect of remaining unnoticed, of losing one's individuality.
Another argument against school uniforms is that they lack the comfort of everyday garments.

We also ought to ask ourselves what the incentive IS behind introducing school uniforms. What's in it for whom? Schools GAIN money by arranging contracts with tailoring firms. Also, schools strengthen their names once they bring in the uniforms. This is due to their students being identified BY the clothes they wear and consequently BY the name of the institution.

After having put forth the facts as they are, objectively, I'd like to comment on ONE OR two THINGS.

The arguments that support the main idea are the ones I agree with, and most people would, too.
However, part of the opposing thesis lacks underlying support. It is rather superficial. First, when you begin identifying yourself with how you look and what your clothes are, you BECOME shallow. A person is a complex of many things, not only A FEW CLOTHES. I can adduce a fine example. Uniforms were made compulsory right after I entered high school. The resistance was huge; crumpled blue shirts and striped ties were clogging the rucksacks. Students despised, and still do, but less, uniforms.
Second, I am inclined to agree that sometimes school attire isn't the most pleasant feeling for one's skin.
The biggest problem notwithstanding is schools. To put it in a nutshell, countries need sheep. And seemingly, uniforms everywhere are brought in under some other pretext. But, alas, that's the first step to producing clueless tools.

Then again, schools cannot impose uniforms simply because they like them. They first have to FIND OUT, if you will, WHETHER students want this change or not. This perhaps is the most reasonable deduction that could be made - every separate school asking before making any CHANGES.

Well done.

Alan
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[SkiIucK]

I am extremely, extremely grateful, Alan!