| #3 (permalink) Thu Jun 25, 2009 18:43 pm TOEFL essay: A company is going to give some money either to support the arts
|If a company is going to give money either to support the arts or to protect the environment, I think protecting the environment is (the)better choice because the (present) condition of our environment really needs to be protected. Moreover, while (a) clean environment brings good health to human(s), arts brings (only)relaxation and entertainment. However, how we can feel relaxed if we are sick(?)
Firstly, (the)environment needs to be protected. It is (obvious) that our environment has been damag(ed) in (many)different (ways).
Air pollution, for example, (is)one of the most striking issues in society, ( and is threatening) peoples health more and more. It also participates (in creating) the greenhouse warming (effect) which allows the sunshine to pass through the atmosphere but absorb(ed) heat is radiated back from the warmed surface on(to) the earth.
Therefore, it affects not only (our) health but also (is very)damaging (to)the living condition(s) on the earth.
Secondly, protecting the environment can be benef(icial) (to following) generations. The protection of the environment is going to maintain (a) good environment not only at present, but also in the future. (The next generation will greatly appreciate the fact that the environment in which they live was created by their forefathers. It will be a far-reaching contribution to society in the long run.)
On the other hand, art is a type of social science that is not (so)easy to understand, so (only)a few people (would) get the benefits if the company is going to support it.
Meanwhile, by building a park or growing more trees, all people can enjoy the clean(er) environment. Their health will be better, and the(ir) working (output) will increase.
Last but not least, the clear, beautiful and peaceful environment is the most precious art in the world. Imaging a world with flowers, birds and green grass , it is relaxation for all. not only the human(s) but also (for)nature.
In conclusion, a company should give money to protect our environment. Because of the (state) of our present environment, the protection of the environment has benefits in (the) long run for everybody.
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