TOEFL® essay: My favourite sports

[Hema Bernard]

Hi

please do correct my errors where ever necessary.

Here is my Essay

My Favourite Sports

My favourite sport is Cricket. Cricket is a wonderful game between the two teams. Each team will have eleven players and two to three substitutes. Out eleven players five to six players will be bats men, and the rest will be a bowlers and fielders and one wicket keeper. Skipper will be appointed to lead the team. It is a team game.

Cricket is an one day match and now it is played for threes hours too. Cricket field will have pitch with stamps and bales and two ends, where two bats men will be placed and will get the score by running between the pitches. Two umpires will be placed between the two pitches and the third umpire will be sitting in the room and seeing the match through the video. The umpires has to look at the bowlers and the batsmen playing and take proper decision on declaring the wickets, the wickets may be by catch, run out or stamp out and in the bowling umpires judge the bowls as wide ball, no ball, leg by etc. when umpire is not able to judge some of the wickets then umpire would signal to the third umpire and the third umpire will declare the wicket by cross checking by replying the runs.

A one day match has 50 overs (6 balls per over) in the first inning and second inning and at the beginning of the match skippers from both the team will be present for the toss. Winning skipper will be given the choice to select for bating / chasing. In the first Inning the game will go over till the 50 overs (6 balls per over) or till all the Ten bats men are out and then after an hour break the second innings will follow and the second bating team has to chase the score. In case the team is not able to complete the target then the first bating team will be considered has a win.

The winning team will be awarded with the trophy and the Man of the Match award will be selected from the winning team. Player who has performed well throughout the game will be awarded Man of the Match.

In this game the score will raise depending on the runs the bats men are getting, if the ball touches the boundary line then it is considered has four runs and when the batsmen hit the ball out of the boundary line in full toss then it is considered has six runs. The two bats men will run between the pitch.

Skipper role is to lead the team and guide the fielder and discuss with the bowlers when ever there is a glitch. He will also speak to the umpires on behalf of the players. Umpires will discuss with skipper for any problem in the game or weather etc. skipper can take certain decision on the field. Skipper will also be present in the team selection. Skipper has a key role.

Next players is Wicket Keeper, wicket keeper also plays a key role. He will be placed behind the stamps. He should be very cautious for each ball. In case if he misfields, the ball may directly go to the boundary and the bating team will get the score. he cannot change the fielding place like other players.

Bowlers also play key role to the team. There are fast bowlers, spin bowlers etc. Bowlers should be very cautious when bowling. If he bowls a loose ball the bats men will have advantage of hitting sixes and fours. They should try to take wickets at the earliest to avoid increase in the run rate by the bating team. If the bowlers are bowlers towards the back side of the batsmen, then it is considered has wide ball, so the one ball & run will be given extra. When the bowler is crossing the pitches then it given has no ball, again there will be extra run & a ball.

Bats men are also play key role in the team. In each team at least 5 to 6 bats men will be there, or in some team all the ten to eleven players will be a good batsmen. They are one who get the better score for the team where chase team finds difficult to chase the target or when they are chasing they hit shots and try to touch the target.

From the above explanation it is understood that the Cricket game is a team play. A Unity team will always see win.

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[Kitosdad]

Hello little Emma. :) :)
Your essay should have been posted on the essay thread. Maybe Slava will move it there and then we can work on it for you.

Kitos.
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[Kitosdad]

My favourite sport is (c)ricket. Cricket is a wonderful game (played)between two teams. Each team (has) eleven players and two to three substitutes.
Out ( of the)eleven players five to six players will be batsmen, and the rest will be bowlers and fielders and one wicket keeper. (A) skipper will be appointed to lead the team. It is a team game.

Cricket is a one day match and it is played for threes hours . The cricket field will have (a)pitch with st(u)mps and bales and two ends where two (batsmen) will be placed and (they)will get the score by running between the (sets of stumps).

(Each umpire will be positioned beside each set of stumps.) and the third umpire will be sitting in (a) room (watching) the match (on a) video(sceen.)

The umpires (have) to look at the bowlers and the batsmen playing, and take proper decision(s) on declaring the(loss of) wickets. The (loss of)wickets may be by catch, run out or st(u)mp(ed) out, and in the bowling umpires judge the bowls as wide ball, no ball, leg by etc.

When (an)umpire is not able to judge some of the (fall of)wickets then (the)umpire would signal to the third umpire and the third umpire will declare the wicket (valid or not.)

A one day match has 50 overs (6 balls per over). In the first inning(s) and second inning(s) At the beginning of the match skippers from both (of)the team(s) will be present for the toss. Winning skipper will be given the choice to elect (to) (bat) / (field).

In the first (i)nning(s) the game will go (on until) the 50 overs (6 balls per over) or (until) all the (t)en (batsmen) are out. (A)fter an hour(s) break the second innings will follow, and the second bat(t)ing team has to chase the score. In case the team is not able to complete the target then the first bat(t)ing team will be considered (as the winning side.)

The winning team will be awarded with the trophy, and the Man of the Match award will be selected from the winning team. The player who has performed (best) throughout the game will be awarded Man of the Match.

In this game the score will (rise) depending on the runs the (batsmen) are getting.
If the ball touches the boundary line then it is considered (to be worth) four runs and when the batsmen hit the ball out of the boundary line then it is considered (to be worth)six runs. The two (batsmen) will run between the (stumps for lesser value scores).

(The role of skipper)is to lead the team and guide the fielder(s) and discuss with the bowlers (whenever) there is a glitch. He will also speak to the umpires on behalf of the players. Umpires will discuss with (the)skipper (over) any problem in the game (or about)the weather (conditions) etc. )
The)skipper can take certain decision(s) on the field. (The)skipper will also be present in the team selection. (The)skipper has a key role.

(The)next (key)player is (the)wicket keeper. He will be placed behind the st(u)mps. He should be very cautious for each ball. If he mis-fields, the ball may directly go to the boundary and the bat(t)ing team will get the score. (H)e cannot change the fielding place like (the)other players.

Bowlers also play(a)key role (in) the team. There are fast bowlers, spin bowlers etc. Bowlers should be very cautious when bowling. If he bowls a loose ball the (batsman) will have (the easy)advantage of hitting sixes and fours.
They should try to take wickets (as soon as they can) to avoid (an)increase in the run rate by the bat(t)ing team. If the bowlers (bowl) towards the back side of the batsmen, then it is considered (as a) wide ball, so the one ball & run will be given extra. When the bowlers ( ball) is crossing the pitch then it (is)given (as a) no ball, (and)again there will be (an)extra run & a ball.

(Batsmen) also (a)play key role in the team. In each team at least 5 to 6 (batsmen) will be there, or in some team(s) all the ten to eleven players will be good batsmen. They are (the)one(s) who get the better score for the team.

From the above explanation it is understood that (the game of) (c)ricket is a team (game). A (unified) team will (usually always win.)
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[Kitosdad]

My favourite sport is (c)ricket. Cricket is a wonderful game (played)between two teams. Each team (has) eleven players and two to three substitutes.
Out ( of the)eleven players five to six players will be batsmen, and the rest will be bowlers and fielders and one wicket keeper. (A) skipper will be appointed to lead the team. It is a team game.

Cricket is a one day match and it is played for threes hours . The cricket field will have (a)pitch with st(u)mps and bales and two ends where two (batsmen) will be placed and (they)will get the score by running between the (sets of stumps).

(Each umpire will be positioned beside each set of stumps.) and the third umpire will be sitting in (a) room (watching) the match (on a) video(sceen.)

The umpires (have) to look at the bowlers and the batsmen playing, and take proper decision(s) on declaring the(loss of) wickets. The (loss of)wickets may be by catch, run out or st(u)mp(ed) out, and in the bowling umpires judge the bowls as wide ball, no ball, leg by etc.

When (an)umpire is not able to judge some of the (fall of)wickets then (the)umpire would signal to the third umpire and the third umpire will declare the wicket (valid or not.)

A one day match has 50 overs (6 balls per over). At the beginning of the match skippers from both (of)the team(s) will be present for the toss. Winning skipper will be given the choice to elect (to) (bat) / (field).

In the first (i)nning(s) the game will go (on until) the 50 overs (6 balls per over) or (until) all the (t)en (batsmen) are out. (A)fter an hour(s) break the second innings will follow, and the second bat(t)ing team has to chase the score. In case the team is not able to complete the target then the first bat(t)ing team will be considered (as the winning side.)

The winning team will be awarded with the trophy, and the Man of the Match award will be selected from the winning team. The player who has performed (best) throughout the game will be awarded Man of the Match.

In this game the score will (rise) depending on the runs the (batsmen) are getting.
If the ball touches the boundary line then it is considered (to be worth) four runs and when the batsmen hit the ball out of the boundary line then it is considered (to be worth)six runs. The two (batsmen) will run between the (stumps for lesser value scores).

(The role of skipper)is to lead the team and guide the fielder(s) and discuss with the bowlers (whenever) there is a glitch. He will also speak to the umpires on behalf of the players. Umpires will discuss with (the)skipper (over) any problem in the game (or about)the weather (conditions) etc. )
The)skipper can take certain decision(s) on the field. (The)skipper will also be present in the team selection. (The)skipper has a key role.

(The)next (key)player is (the)wicket keeper. He will be placed behind the st(u)mps. He should be very cautious for each ball. If he mis-fields, the ball may directly go to the boundary and the bat(t)ing team will get the score. (H)e cannot change the fielding place like (the)other players.

Bowlers also play(a)key role (in) the team. There are fast bowlers, spin bowlers etc. Bowlers should be very cautious when bowling. If he bowls a loose ball the (batsman) will have (the easy)advantage of hitting sixes and fours.
They should try to take wickets (as soon as they can) to avoid (an)increase in the run rate by the bat(t)ing team. If the bowlers (bowl) towards the back side of the batsmen, then it is considered (as a) wide ball, so the one ball & run will be given extra. When the bowlers ( ball) is crossing the pitch then it (is)given (as a) no ball, (and)again there will be (an)extra run & a ball.

(Batsmen) also (a)play key role in the team. In each team at least 5 to 6 (batsmen) will be there, or in some team(s) all the ten to eleven players will be good batsmen. They are (the)one(s) who get the better score for the team.

From the above explanation it is understood that (the game of) (c)ricket is a team (game). A (unified) team will (usually always win.)
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[Hema Bernard]

Hi Kitosdad,

Thanks a ton,

Could u please tell me, What is my problem, where should i improve and How

Thanks Once
Hema

[Kitosdad]

Hello Hemma, your main problem is the lack of using the indefinite article, a and an.

I think your subject, cricket, was a little beyond your understanding as it was difficult to edit it due to the errors you had made. However, you made a good attempt, and I'm sure your next essay will be a lot better.

Kitos.
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[Mkdeniel]

My favorite sports is the basketball. I daily play the basketball with my friends in the club. I love the basketball to play. I also play the football sometime. Basketball is the wonderful game in the world.

[Beeesneees]

'Basketball' does not take the article.
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