TOEFL® paragraph: Reasons for people doing exercise

[Paresh]

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'Reasons for people doing exercise'

People are doing exercise because they want to keep themselves fit and healthy. The first important reason for people exercise is that exercise keeps their body fit. Moreover, exercise makes people active and energetic at home as well as at workplace. For example, people feel fresh and perform their routine activities with more concentration. Besides, exercise helps people to increase their self-confidence. In fact, there is something deeply satisfying about realizing people’s potential, doing their best, making the most of what people have when they are exercising. This in turn increase people’s feeling of self-worth and self-confidence because they feel good about themselves. According to the latest joint American Hearth Association / American College of Sports Medicine guide lines on physical activity, all healthy adults ages 18-65 should be getting at least 30 minutes of moderate intensity activity five days of the week. The second most significant reason for people exercise is that exercise keeps them healthy. Many people believe that exercise keeps them away from doctors. In addition, according to a research it has been found that in order to maintain ones arteries hale and healthy, it is mandatory for everyone to maintain a regular exercise program. Many seniors or older people prefer to do mild exercise, because even mild, regular exercise can extend their life span, and improve mental and physical functions. Furthermore, exercise can help seniors or older people maintain independence, recover from illness and reduce their risk of disease. In conclusion, people are doing exercise in order to keep themselves physically as well as mentally fit and healthy in today’s fast paced environment.

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