TOEFL® essay: Is progress always good?

[Blackswallow]

Is progress always good? Definitely it is. Progress in people will make that one become better. Progress in economy will provide more product and improve our living condtion. Progress in technology will make our lives become much more comfortable.

Fistly, when a people progress, that is when s/he become better. If a person progresses in study, that is mean s/he get more knowledge. If a person progresses in working, they can get higher salary. How could anybody said that s/he do not want to make a progression?

Secondly, when the economy progress, that is when people get a better life. An progressed economy will bring a lot of job to your country. Moreover, when the economy develop, there will be more and more fogein invest money in your country. These will increase the Gross National Product. In general, development of economy will improve living condition in a country.

Lastly, when the technology are progressed, that’s when people can live more comfortablely. Now we have air-condition so we don’t have to suffer harsh weather, washing machine to help us clean clothes. We also have cars and plane to take us to wherever we want. And the most important is that progress in technology bring us new surgery model to cure people of serious disease.

Progress is good, and it always is. Progress in any aspect would provide people a new wonderful life. But how can we make it progress, that may be a much harder question.

[Blackswallow]

Is progress always good? Definitely it is. Progress in people will make that one become better. Progress in economy will provide more product and improve our living condition. Progress in technology will make our lives become much more comfortable.

Fisrtly, when a people progress, that is when s/he become(s) better. If a person progresses in study, that is mean s/he get(s) more knowledge. If a person progresses in working, she/he can get higher salary. How could anybody said that s/he do(es) not want to make a progression?

Secondly, when the economy progress(es), that is when people get better lives. An progressed economy will bring a lot of job to your country. Moreover, when the economy develop, there will be more and more foreign(er) invest money in your country. These will increase the Gross National Product. In general, development of economy will improve living condition in a country.

Lastly, when the technology are progressed, that’s when people can live more comfortably. Now we have air-condition so we don’t have to suffer harsh weather, washing machine to help us clean clothes. We also have cars and plane to take us to wherever we want. And the most important is that progress in technology bring us new surgery model to cure people of serious disease.

Progress is good, and it always is. Progress in any aspect would provide people (with) a new wonderful life. But how can we make it progress, that may be a much harder question.
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[Kitosdad]

Is progress always good? Definitely it is.
Progress in people will make one become better. Progress in (the)economy will provide more product(s) and improve our living condition(s). Progress in technology will make our lives become much more comfortable.

Firstly, when a (person progresses), that is when s/he become(s) better. If a person progresses in study, that mean s/he get(s) more knowledge. If a person progresses in working, she/he can get (an)higher salary. How could anybody said that s/he do(es) not want to make progress?

Secondly, when the economy progress(es), that is when people get better lives.
A progressed economy will bring a lot of job(s) to your country. Moreover, when the economy develop(s), there will be more and more foreign(er(s) invest(ing) money in your country. These will increase the Gross National Product. In general, (the)development of (the)economy will improve living condition(s) in a country.

Lastly, when the technolog(ies) are progressed, that’s when people can live more comfortably. Now we have air-condition(ing) so we don’t have to suffer harsh weather, washing machine(s) to help us clean (our)clothes. We also have cars and plane(s) to take us to wherever we want (to go). And the most important (point)is that progress in technology bring(s) us new surgery model(s) to cure people of serious disease(s).

Progress is good, and it always (will be.). Progress in any aspect would provide people (with) new wonderful li(ves).

But how can we make it progress, that may be a much harder question.????????
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[Bxnl]

It is inevitable that people have tried to progress as much as they can. However, is getting a rapid advancement good for them? In my opinion, people should have their progress gradually and also firmly.

To begin with, progressing quickly will link to people's satisfaction. At this period of time, people seemly think that success can be achieved easily and thus they need not try as hard as before. For instance, in learning English, student always get excited at the fist time. However, receiving too much over-implementation from their parents make them become an intelligent one so that they just play and still have good grades. This, therefore, will erase what they have learnt due to lacking of practicing regularly. As a result, those people, whenever realize how they have decreased in their study, get extremely disappointed about their selves and their courageousness seem to be perceptibly nil.

Secondly, on the road of business men, they are able to forget the risks surrounded in case they get too much profits when has just begun their career for just one or two years. In truth, in certain case these business men are well-prepared and get their achievement, it's absolutely good. However, if they catch their goal with the majority of luck, they are likely to fail, or even lost every thing, in their next strategy for they predict things will be easy like the previous one. This, in somehow, can lead them to a bad consequence.

To sum up, taking progress too rapidly is not always a best thing in life. We must build up every thing step by step and this will not fill us with terror and unpleasantness.