TOEFL® essay: Do you like to eat out or at home?

[Engg]

Hi for you all

Could you please correct me that essay?

Do you like to eat out or at home
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Changing daily routine is so significant in our life. By his nature, human beings get bored of the usual stuff which he-she used to do regularly, every day and all over the time. One of these stuff is food cooking. Eating at home or out has physiological, socially and economical point of view.

Physiologically, when man is extremely bored about the life style, he or she decides to change this mind-numbing things, such as going out to eat at a restaurant, instead of staying at home, preparing for lunch or dinner and doing the same repetitive actions. This step is very effective in man life, it helps him-her to get ride of the unpleasant things he-she used to do, especially if he-she does not like to cook every day like me. In spite of that, I prefer to eat at home rather than going out to eat, but in a few cases, I go to restaurant not every day, may be once a month. One major advantage of eating out, as I consider it, that there will be no dishes need to be cleaned.

Socially, we can arrange appointment to meet our friends and relatives to eat together in a company instead of eating out alone and in a new atmosphere. So by that we can preserve the family bonds and relationships between friends.

Economically, eating out is more expensive than eating at home. So eating out every day will destroy one's budget.

In conclusion, I like always to change my life style, and eating out is a way to overcome the daily routine of going to market to buy food ,preparing meals and clean dishes. But this not happen every day, because I do not destroy my budget while I am trying to destroy the boring routine.
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Thanks for your expected cooperations
Engg

[Kitosdad]

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(Our) daily routine is so significant in our life. By his nature, (a) human being get(s) bored of the usual(things) which he-she used to do regularly, every day and all over the time. One of these(things) is cooking. Eating at home or out has physiological, socially and economical point(s) of view.

Physiologically, when man is extremely bored about (his) life style, he decides to change this mind-numbing (routine), such as going out to eat at a restaurant, instead of staying at home, preparing for lunch or dinner and doing the same repetitive actions.

This step is very effective in (a) man(s) life, it helps him to get rid of the unpleasant things he used to do, especially if he does not like to cook every day like me.
In spite of that, I prefer to eat at home rather than going out to eat, but in a few cases, I go to (a)restaurant not every day, (maybe) once a month. One major advantage of eating out, as I consider it, (is) that there will be no dishes (that) need to be cleaned.

Socially, we can arrange (an)appointment to meet our friends and relatives to eat together in company instead of eating out alone and in a new atmosphere. So by that we can preserve the family bonds and relationships between friends.

Economically, eating out is more expensive than eating at home. So eating out every day will destroy one's budget.

In conclusion, I always like to change my life style, and eating out is a way to overcome the daily routine of going to market to buy food ,prepar(e) meals and clean dishes. But this (does)not happen every day, because I do not destroy my budget while I am trying to destroy the boring routine.
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[Honey2]

about myself i like eat at home

i love my mother to cook for us

i donnot go out alot

i am shy to walk alone in the street and every one see me

my little home is my favorite place
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[Arh]

I like to eat meal in home too, because I believe it is more healthy than others.
Honey I am like you, mostly I am in my small office and do not go out. every morning I come here and at the late night I come-back to home for sleeping. by the way I don't have any bad feeling because I can go to every where in the world from Internet like you. so please do not think that you are in the prison.

[Engg]

Thanks a lot Mr.Kitosdad

[Honey2]

[J1m_My18]

Hi guys,

I am a new member of your wonderful forum. I have some problems with the speaking and writing section in the TOEFL-test. Therefore, I ask you to evaluate my first essay. I know that the essay is not perfect, but it makes no sense if I post only perfect essays. Thank you very much:

Do you like to eat out or eat at home?

In the modern society, many people are so busy that they haven’t time to cook. Therefore, more and more people prefer to eat outside. On the other side, people like to cook at home as in the traditional society. They said that cooking is very funny and you can cook what you want to eat. In my opinion, eating at home is the better choice because it is cheaper, a social event and you can cook what you want to eat.
First of all, I think that cooking at home is much cheaper then eating outside. Every restaurant or bar has to get a profit. Therefore, they have to add some values on every price to achieve a profit. If you cook at home, you will buy only the ingredients for the meal. For this reason, you have only to pay for these ingredients and maybe for the energy you need to cook the meal.
Second, I believe that eating at home is a social event. Persons sit on a table with their families and they enjoy the meal. During the dinner, people are able to speak with each other. In the modern society, everybody have not enough time to sit down and relax, but a nice meal with the family is the best method to forget the stress in the job or other problems. Therefore, I think that eating at home is the best way to relax and have fun.
Finally, I think that eating at home is better than eating outside, because it is healthier. For example, in a restaurant nobody knows how clean the kitchen is and what kind of ingredients are used. At home persons are able to choose the ingredients in a shop. They can choose food without any toxic treatments or genetic mutations.
In conclusion, I like it to eat at home due to of the reasons which I mentioned in this essay. I think that eating is a very important activity, which you cannot do by the way.

[Richard]

Hi J1m My18.
since you have an inordinate fondness for writing:

1- You have used a phrase “I think that” 3 times in your essay and it is not acceptable enough for getting a high score. Try to use alternative phrase.
2-Use hygienic for foods, don’t use clean.( health food = noun)
3-On the other side,= on the other hand,
4-As in the traditional society = especially ….instead of as
5-They said that cooking is very funny= They believe that cooking is highly enjoyable because you can make what you want to eat.
6-,a social event (what do you mean by that?, make it clear for reader it might leads to misunderstanding, or misconception of your viewpoint, and you can cook what you want to eat.( you should not use repetitive statement.)
7-First of all, I think that cooking at home is much cheaper then eating outside.= (since (inasmuch as) eating a homemade food is cheaper that shop-bought one I prefer to cook.
8-make/earn/turn a profit = not achieve a profit.
9-Firstly…Secondly….and so on…
10-Everyone=everybody has to..
11-Try to use beautiful adjective= a decent/proper meal
12- I think that eating is a very important activity, which you cannot do by the way.( Why we cannot do it( eat)? It doesn’t make sense.)
13-I think that eating is a very important activity,= It is undoubtedly clear that eating is the basic necessity of human beings as an everyday chore.
14-They can choose food without any toxic treatments or genetic mutations. (It doesn’t make sense for me; I suppose that you just wanna use the words that you know, regardless of knowing them as well, It’s the worse thing in writing.)
15-I like it to eat at home due to of the reasons=due to the reason that...

Good luck.
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[Amoolh]

Wow i learned a lot from your correction .Could u please do the same thing with me(^_^)
Thanks in advance Richard

[Richard]

Hi Kitos.
thanks for being helpful. and you Engg, you should write more and you need to be careful about your grammatical structure.
The more you read, the more acceptable you'll write. moreover, your ideas didn't flow cohesively and it wasn't maturely organized.
Good luck.
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[Richard]

Hey guys be careful about prepositions.
"at home" or take the phrase "Good luck in your new home!" for example. they are correct.
please don't say "in home."
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