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 #2 (permalink) Sat Jul 18, 2009 13:39 pm relative pronouns |
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| Better read about articles and use singular and plural and relative pronouns to correct your work. That way it will be permanent knowledge gained. best of luck, nanucbe |
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| #3 (permalink) Sun Jul 19, 2009 21:33 pm Romans |
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| Gerald wrote: |
The Mighty Roman empire who ruled nearly half of the whole world,suddenly just vanished from the face of the earth(,) only to leave behind a trails of their mighty monuments and places.
Kindly check the Grammar
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I'd suggest changing 'who' to 'which', since it was the 'empire' not the 'Romans' who ruled.
Also, 'a trails' is incorrect. 'A' is an indefinite singular article, but you're using it to modify a plural noun. I'd suggest making 'trails' singular, for better comprehension.
We need at least one comma in there to avoid a run-on sentence. Additionally, you could consider a second comma after 'earth'.
Finally, 'mighty' is not a proper adjective, and shouldn't be capitalized.
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| #4 (permalink) Mon Jul 20, 2009 2:28 am Romans |
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| "Suddenly' and 'just' occur side by side. 'Just' may mean without a trace or in a very easy manner. 'It just vanished' may mean that it disappeared into thin air without a trace or trail.. This 'Fall of the Roman Empire' did not happen on a single day to merit either sudden or just. It was neither 'sudden' nor 'just.' So these along wih what you have suggested should also be corrected. best of luck, nanucbe. |
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